IBT writing passage 1 part 1
Do you agree or disagree the following statement: Compared with the people who live in the cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
When it comes to family affection, many people hold that compared with the people who live in the cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. I is wildely acknowledged that people who live in the rural areas could have more time to be with their family members and take care of them anytime. But I doubt whether to be with their family members would take care of them better? In my opinion, to take care of family should involve at least three points: suffcient economic strength, healthy living environment and high-quality educational environment which cannot be acquired from rural areas.
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IBT writing passage 1 part 1
Do you agree or disagree the following statement: Compared with the people who live in the cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
When it comes to family affection, many people hold that compared with the people who live in the cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. It is widely acknowledged that people who live in the rural areas could have more time to be with their family members and take care of them anytime. But I doubt whether to be with their family members would take care of them better. In my opinion, to take care of family should involve at least three points: suffcient economic strength, a healthy living environment and high-quality educational environment which cannot be acquired in rural areas.
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Your sentence "I doubt whether to be with their family members would take care of them better?" should not be posed as a question unless it is written as a question. The words used form a statement, not a question.
The word but is used to join phrases and shouldn't be used to begin a sentence.
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In the second paragraph, perhaps you can rephrase it like the following.
When it comes to family affection, many people hold the belief that the people living in a rural environment can take better care of their families than the people living in an urban environment.
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IBT writing passage 1 part 1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Compared Comparing with the people who live in the cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
When it comes to family affection, many people hold feel that compared in comparison with the people who live in the cities, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. It is wildely acknowledged that people who live in the rural areas could have more time to be spend with their family members and take care of them at anytime. But I doubt that whether to be spending more time with their family members would means taking better care of them better?. In my opinion, to take care of one's family should involves meeting at least these three essential points: Having a suffcient economic financial strength, healthy a good standard of living, environment and a high-quality of educational learning environment, all of which cannot be are hard to acquired from obtain in rural areas (in a rural environment).
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