An Essay for IELTS Writing Task 2
Approximately a few years ago, an item of news that a graduate from Peking University sold pork in Beijing had sparked much debate in the whole society. Students who studied in ordinary colleges were quite disappointed and even despaired by asking what they can do if a Peking University’s graduate cannot find a decent job. Unfortunately the truth is, graduation means unemployment. In other words, an increasing number of college graduates cannot get themselves employed in the passing few years, what is worse, this trend will be continued in the coming years according to some researches.
Undoubtedly, the problem above exerts impact on both individuals and society. It is universally acknowledged that youth is to family as sun is to the universe. Viewed as a pillar in family, a youngster naturally should shoulder the responsibility of supporting family, especially after his or her parents retire. Providing the earnings are not adequate for living, these youngsters will blame themselves deeply and lack a sense of self-fulfillment. Therefore, a series of consequent social problems will be produced such as rising rates of suicides and crimes. Besides, thousands of graduates cannot apply what they have learned in university to construction of nation and society, or work at those positions that don’t match to their majors or degrees, which is a waste of talents in the long run.
Governments, universities and individuals all should take affirmative actions to address such problems. For governments’ part, relevant policies need to be issued to ease pressures of labor markets. For instance, they can offer some specific benefits to encourage the young to established their own businesses. From where universities stand, more practical courses should be set up for students to firm their professional knowledge. In addition, college students ought to attach more importance to their work skills and accumulate experience by doing some internships. Only in these ways can a country gain better development.
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I would not consider revising it, it's perfect... very well written!, very true and accurate also.
Only thing I found is 1 misspelled word:
"established" should be "establish"
"frim" should be "form"
... young to establish their own businesses ...
... for students to form their professional ...
~Robert
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can anybody help me revise this essay? many many thanks^^
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