"Happiness,how a beautiful and meaningful word it is !"

应该改为：“Happiness, what a beautiful and meaningful word it is!"

"But what is happiness?Is it inner feeling or material comforts?It has no shape,no color and no weight.It can't be seen or touched.But every one looking forward to it."

这句句子应该改为：“But everyone hopes to find it."

"There is a thousand Hamlets in a thousands people’s eyes."

应该改为："There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes."

"Happiness is the same way, People try to get it in many ways."

英文，我们“find happiness," 不是 "get happiness." 可是，你可以说“get happy“ 和 “got happy." 比如说：“I get happy every time I hear this song." 但是，在找幸福，你必须用“find." 所以， 在这里，你应该改为：“People try to find it in many ways."

“Some people find that only good health can enable them to get it, so they take part in all kinds of sports and games.“

应该改为："Some people believe that only good health can bring them happiness, so they take part in all kinds of sports and games."

"Some people think money means it,they will feel happy when they get material comforts,and so they try to make more money."

应该改为：“Some people think money brings happiness; that they will feel happier once they attain more material comforts, and so they try to make more money."

"Others believe that knowledge can bring it to them.So they study very hard.They try to find the inner peace which,they believe,is the happiness."

后面的句子应该改为：“They seek the inner peace which they believe can be acquired through vast knowledge."  

"So,just find a balance between inner feeling and material comforts,you will be truly happy."

应该改为："So in order to find true happiness, we must have balance in our lives. While there is much delight to be had in acquiring material things that add comfort and enrichment to our lives, we must also never neglect our inner, intellectual needs, which must be nurtured and fulfilled in order to find true happiness."

你的英文写得非常好！继续加油！：）））