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One of my students talked to me the other day:That how much her father cares about her and always let her to eat the good stuff at meals . But she always tell her father to eat more. She thinks her father is too much care about her and her little brother and less about himself. She hopes her father can think of himself more and eat more. But his father always insist let the good stuff for her and her little brother.
She really touched me. She is so little. Just 10 or 11. But can think of others.
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One of my students talked to me the other day: how much her father cares about her and always lets her to eat the good stuff at meals. But she always tells her father to eat more. She thinks her father cares too mcuh about her and her little brother and less about himself. She hopes her father can think of himself more and eat more. But her father always insists to leave the good stuff for her and her little brother.
She really touched me. She is so little, just 10 or 11, but can think of others.
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One of my students told to me the other day about how much her father cares about her and always lets her to eat the good stuff best parts of the dish at meals. (If we're talking about roast chicken or duck, or a variety of dishes, this makes more sense.) Still, she always tells her father to eat more himself. She thinks her father he is cares too much about her and her little brother, and too little about himself. She wishes that her father would think of himself more and eat more, but he father always insists on leaving the best parts for her and her little brother.
This really touched me. She is so young - only 10 or 11 - but is already thinking of others.
Good work - I added "he" a couple of times, as per Nessssbm's suggestion.
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One of my students talked to me the other day That about how much her father cares about her and always lets her to eat the good stuff at meals . But She always tells her father to eat more. She thinks her father is too much care cares too much about her and her little brother and less about himself. She hopes her father can think of himself more and eat more, but her father always insists on leaving let the good stuff for her and her little brother.
She really touched me. She is so little. Just 10 or 11, but can think of others.
(Just 10 or 11 and already thinking of others).
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Instead of saying "her father" so many times in one paragraph, you could use pronouns, such as "he." : )
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