Introducing Myself

Hello, everybody, my name is Ye Li Fei.I live in Wenzhou, Zhejiang province. I have graduated from university for two months ago, and now I'm in a small company to make as an accountant. 

Grammar tip: if you tell us when something happened in the past, use past simple.  If you don't say when, use present perfect (ie. you are describing the present, using a past event). :)

Make is for things and do is for actions, so you would use do accounting.

My hobbies are swimming, reading, listening to music online and generally surfing the net, and so on.

Lastly, best wishes to everyone at last...

Good luck is wished only when it's needed, eg. for an exam, interview or other challenge.

Nice! Hope this helps.

Introduces Myself

Hello ，everyone,(everybody没什么不对，只是你文章最后用的everyone，对应一下)， I am Ye li fei from Wenzhou city of Zhejiang province. my name is Ye li fei ，I live in zhejiang wenzhou。 I have graduated from university for two months，and now I'm an accountant in a small company to make accounting。 （这里没错误，没修改，但是如果用从句，会好很多）

My hobbies are swimming, reading ，listening to music and surfing online and so on。

（前一段是主动语序，主语是I，这里的主语换成了my hobbies，其实如果继续用I会稍微好一些，for exmple, i like swimming,reading.....尽量统一主语，个人意见） 

good luck to everyone at last。。。