Pets in Hogwarts. Please, check my story for errors
If I were a freshman at Hogwarts, I would have a very difficult choice. I could take only one animal with me: an owl, a cat or a toad.
I wouldn't take a toad, because they are boring and slimy. I would choose between an owl and a cat. An owl can be helpful, bringing mail, but there are also school owls at Hogwarts. I'll take a cat with me. He will soothe and support me, curling up and rumbling.
And next year, when I become a sophomore, I will take both a cat and an owl, and even try to get a dog. Normal, with one head instead of three. We will make an agreement with friends and those who don't have pets will take my surplus. And in the dormitory we will release them and live with a bunch of pets. Perfect crime!
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Very neat. Perfect crime - almost :)
" I'll take a cat" - probably better to stay with the conditional. "I'd take a cat."
"Rumbling" - usually we call a cat's happy noise purring.
"Normal, with one head instead of three." You know that this is a sentence fragment - not accepted in standard grammar, but everywhere. It doesn't really matter, except to your grammar teacher.
"Agreement with friends" - perhaps an "agreement among friends" ?
"Surplus" is OK, but how about "extras"? It's not really better, though.
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