8/18 practice
In this day and age, with cars becoming affordable for more and more people, traffic jams have become one of our most pressing problems. Personally, I am with the solution that drivers are supposed to be charged extra fees in peak hours when they are driving in a busy street. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, it is a gateway to reduce traffic jams in major cities. There is no double that the levied fee would be an effective solution to improve the traffic situation due to people will be reluctant to pay for extra tools. And fewer cars run on roads would lead to a vast improvement in traffic issues.
Moreover, it would be beneficial for the society in many aspects. Firstly, the utilize of public transportation would be enhanced significantly. In fact, there is no better way to encourage people to use public transportation than to charge private mobile vehicles at a specific time. This is because most people would like to give up driving and transfer to take subways or buses, which will essentially lower emissions from cars. Besides, for those who live nearby the street in the center of the city, it would be a blessing since the reducing number of cars would certainly reduce the noise.
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Hi Rachel!
Please take a look at my recent edit and remove the highlighted word "by" - that was my error- sorry.
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8/18 practice
In this day and age, (no need to add a comma after the word age) with cars becoming affordable for more and more people, traffic jams have become one of our most pressing problems. Personally, my solution is that drivers get charged extra fees during peak hours while driving on a busy street. I am with the solution that drivers are supposed to be charged extra fees in peak hours when they are driving in a busy street. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, my solution it is a gateway to reduce traffic jams in major cities. There is no double (this makes no sense do you mean there is no "doubt")? that the levied fee would be an effective solution to improve the traffic situation due to people will be reluctant to pay for extra tools. (this word seems to not fit - do you mean "tolls" or the "extra fees")? Suggestion: There is no doubt that the levied fees would be an effective solution to improving the traffic dilemma; for people will be reluctant to paying extra fees. Also, there will be vast improvements made regarding traffic issues as there will be fewer cars on the road. And fewer cars run on roads would lead to a vast improvement in traffic issues.
Moreover, it would be a benefit beneficial for the society in many aspects. Firstly, the utilize utilization of public transportation would be enhanced significantly. In fact, there is no better way to encourage people to use public transportation than to charge private mobile vehicles at a specific time. This is because most people would like to give up driving and transfer switch to take taking the subways or buses instead; which will essentially lower emissions from cars. Besides, for those who live nearby the street in the center of the city, it would be a blessing since the reducing number of cars would certainly reduce the noise. Besides, central city residents who live nearby streets will be blessed with a reduction in noise as the result of lesser cars on the road.
My edited version:
In this day and age with cars becoming more affordable for increasingly more people, traffic jams have become one of our most pressing problems. Personally, my solution is that drivers get charged with extra fees during peak hours while driving on busier streets.
First of all, my solution is a gate way to reducing traffic jams in major cities. There is no doubt that the levied fees would be an effective solution to improving the traffic dilemma; for people will be reluctant to paying extra costs. Also, there will be vast improvements made regarding traffic issues as there will be fewer cars on the road.
Moreover, it would be a benefit for society in many aspects. Firstly, the utilization of public transportation would be enhanced significantly. In fact, there is no better way to encourage people to use public transportation than to charge private mobile vehicles at a specific time. This is because most people would like to give up driving and switch to taking the subways or buses instead; which will essentially lower emissions from cars. Besides, central city residents who live near by the streets will be blessed with a reduction in noise as the result of lesser cars on the road.
Rachel: I had a fun time editing your paragraphs. I hope my suggestions are helpful for you. Let me know if you have any questions. Keep up the good work.
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