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toefl independent essay, day 11 Could you please correct my essay? The university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Essay It is critically important to spend the university’s budget in a right way with the focus on current students’ needs. I am of the opinion that funding libraries is much more important than spending money on sports facilities and equipment. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay. To begin with, books in libraries have to be up-to-date for the scientific purposes because of ongoing technical progress. Every year a plethora of new articles and textbooks are published all around the world and success in a scientific research could not appear without the access to this new information. For instance, two years ago I was working in a biological laboratory when my supervisor decided to take a look at strange results that was obtained from MRI of a mouse’s brain. We spent days trying to explain the observed phenomena, but it was challenging. Nevertheless, we did not give up and begin to look at currently published articles. As soon as we found in one of them the description of a quite similar experiment, we understood what we had observed and continued our experiments in a different way. If we had not seen this article in a university library, we would have continued to waste our time trying to find an explanation. Second, sports can be done without any facilities at all. There are many types of sports that can be chosen according to your personal preference and health restrictions which do not need any extra equipment. My own experience is a compelling example of it. When I was enrolled in my university, I decided to take part in a local running club. In our daily training we use only professional clothes and small balls with sand to improve our force. Also, participation in a such club was free of charge. Training with people who have the same interests encourages you to train more efficient and not to skip workouts. Moreover, I found my best friend in this club and won a number of running competitions. This example illustrates that sports can be done for free and without any facilities. In conclusion, I believe that spending money on the the libraries’ needs is more important for university than funding sports clubs. This is because of scientific goals and because of unnecessary expenses of sports.

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toefl independent essay, day 11

Could you please correct my essay?
The university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea?
Essay

It is critically important to spend the university’s budget in the right way with the focus on current students’ needs. I am of the opinion that funding libraries is much more important than spending money on sports facilities and equipment. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, books in libraries have to be up-to-date for the scientific purposes because of ongoing technical progress. Every year a plethora of new articles and textbooks are published all around the world and success in a scientific research could not appear happen without the access to this new information. For instance, two years ago I was working in a biological laboratory when my supervisor decided to take a look at strange results that was obtained from a MRI of a mouse’s brain. We spent days trying to explain the observed phenomena, but it was challenging. Nevertheless, we did not give up and began to look at currently published articles. As soon as we found a description in one of them of a quite similar experiment, we understood what we had observed and continued our experiments in a different way. If we had not seen this article in a university library, we would have continued to waste our time trying to find an explanation.
Second, sports can be done without any facilities at all. There are many types of sports that can be chosen according to your personal preference and health restrictions which do not need any extra equipment. My own experience is a compelling example of it. When I was enrolled in my university, I decided to take part in a local running club. In our daily training we used only professional clothes and small balls with sand to improve our strength. Also, participation in a such a club was free of charge. Training with people who have the same interests encourages you to train more efficiently and not to skip workouts. Moreover, I found my best friend in this club and won a number of running competitions. This example illustrates that sports can be done for free and without any facilities.
In conclusion, I believe that spending money on the the libraries’ needs is more important for university than funding sports clubs. This is because of scientific goals and because of unnecessary expenses of sports.


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