What was the makeup of Egyptians for ?
Behind the makeup especially well sophisticated of the Egyptians is hiden a therapeutic aspect.
In fact, they had good reasons to use their products however potentially toxic.
Kohl apply around ancian egyptians eyes was not only estetic fonction: it also owns therapeutic properties.
And more surprising, this property is due to the presence of lead's salt.
Except that in medecin, everything depend on the quantity. Collecting some makeup stored in ancient pots,a researchers team discovered a tiny amount of lead's salt. The salt of lead create the production of monoxyde azote by cells skin, and stimulate immune response.
They think that this kolh prevents the eye infections, that it would be very frequent in the marshy areas of the Nil.
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What Was The Makeup Of Egyptians For ?
Behind the sophisticated makeup, of the Egyptians is hiden a therapeutic aspect.
In fact, they had good reasons to use their products however potentially toxic.
Kohl applied around Ancient Egyptians eyes was not only aesthetic
: it also had therapeutic properties. [had or has use had because we are discussing the past Ancient Egyptians]
And more surprisingly, this property is due to the presence of lead salts'.
Except that in medicine, everything depends on the quantity. Collecting some makeup stored in ancient pots, a researcher's team discovered a tiny amount of a lead salt. The salt of lead creates the production of monoxyde azote by the skin's cells, and stimulates an immune response.
They think that this Kolh prevents eye infections, that it would be very common in the marshy areas of the Nile.
aesthetic = British
estetic=American
use whatever you prefer, if writing in British style stay consistent and use aesthetic,
if definitely using American style also stay consistent and write estectic.
I was forced to write like this estetic=American to prevent my British spellchecker changing it before it was posted.
Very good interesting little read. It did not need a lot of changing really.
It is clear and obvious you mean the lead salts and Kohl are common in the Nile area, if you mean eye infections were common then you need to make a change to that sentence.
Google confirms lead poisoning in the Nile area is common.
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What was the makeup of Egyptians for? [4]
Behind the makeup especially well sophisticated of the Egyptians is hidden a therapeutic aspect.[1]
The makeup often has a hidden therapeutic effect. Especially sophisticated types like the Egyptians had.[1]
In fact, they had good reasons to use their products however although potentially toxic.
Ancient Egyptians applied kohl apply around ancian egyptians their eyes served not only for aestetic purposes / was not only aesthetic function [2] but it also had [3] owns therapeutic properties.
And what's more surprising, is that this property is due to the presence of lead's salts.
Except that in medicine medecin, everything depends on the quantity. Collecting some makeup stored in ancient pots, a researchers' team discovered a tiny amount of lead's salts. The salts of lead create the production of monoxide azote by in cells skin, and stimulate an immune response.
They think that this kolh prevents the eye infections, which is common / that it would be very frequent in the marshy areas of the Nil.
1) I would rethink this sentence altogether since it is hard to digest and understand. I learned one important skill that I think to this day is highly valuable. That is to simplify my thoughts and break it down while trying to express complex ideas in a language that I still learn not très bien.
2) this part of the sentence is stiff and it's necessary to rephrase it.
3) infinitive of have (avoir) in past perfect tense - has/had
4) I've noticed that you place a space between a word and a symbol sometimes, for example, "What was the makeup of Egyptians for ?" -> don't want to nitpick yet this is an incorrect format in English but I believe that it is pretty common in French. I'm not sure that this is the case but I'll try to search for some grammar rules on this if there are any at all.
Thank you for the interesting read, I'm really impressed by how much your write and it actually reminds me to do the same.
Je vous souhaite une excellente journée!
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