toefl independent essay, day 9
Could you please correct my essay?
Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Essay
It is critically important nowadays to live in a place with appropriate conditions and infrastructure according to your needs. Personally, I strongly believe that life in a big city is the best choice for me. I will explore the reasons for this in the following essay.
First, you can reach different districts of a town in a half an hour using public transport and do not spend much money on it. In contrast, you always need to have your own car, when you live in a village, because it is the only one opportunity to reach your destination in the absence of public transport. For instance, sometimes I use underground to go to my university, which situated in the suburb of Moscow. However the large majority of people think that possessing a car is a privilege and luxury, it is really useful and comfortable to travel using a public transport and do not think about traffic jams. I can definitely say, that riding in the underground save me an hour a day. This example demonstrates the usefulness of evolved infrastructure in a city.
Another advantage of living in a big city is an availability of medicine. It is well known that salaries in megalopolises for doctors and nurseries is much higher than in a countryside, therefore the best service in a health care can be found in a big city. My personal experience is a compelling example of it. Five years ago, my grandparents decided to move on in a small village near Moscow, because of air pollution and a desire to grow their own plants. But the worst nightmare became reality. One day my grandfather woke up with strong headache which later appear to be a stroke. Calling an ambulance was the first thing they had done, but there were no free places in a local hospital. If only they had lived in a city, my grandfather would have been alive and health. This example illustrated how the scarcity of medical personnel and hospitals in a neighbourhood can destroy somebody’s life.
In conclusion, I believe, that life in a big city is much preferable than in a small village. This is because of developed infrastructure of public transport and availability of medical help.
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toefl independent essay, day 9
Could you please correct my essay?
Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Essay
It is critically important nowadays to live in a place with appropriate conditions and infrastructure according to your needs. Personally, I strongly believe that life in a big city is the best choice for me. I will explore the reasons for this in the following essay.
First, you can reach different districts of a town in a half an hour using public transport without spending much money on it. In contrast, you always need to have your own car when you live in a village, because it is the only one choice to reach your destination in the absence of public transport. For instance, sometimes I use the subway/underground train to go to my university, which is situated in the suburbs of Moscow. The vast majority of people think that possessing a car is a privilege and luxury, however it is really useful and comfortable to travel by public transport, and to not worry about traffic jams. I can definitely say that riding in the underground saves me an hour a day. This example demonstrates the usefulness of evolved infrastructure in a city.
Another advantage of living in a big city is the availability of medicine. It is well known that salaries in megalopolises for doctors and nurses is much higher than in a countryside, therefore the best service in a health care can be found in a big city. My personal experience is a compelling example of it. Five years ago, my grandparents decided to move to a small village near Moscow, because of air pollution and a desire to grow their own plants. But the worst nightmare became reality. One day my grandfather woke up with strong headache which later appeared to be a stroke. Calling an ambulance was the first thing they did, but there were no free places in a local hospital. If only they had lived in a city, my grandfather would have been alive and healthy. This example illustrates how the scarcity of medical personnel and hospitals in a small village can destroy someone’s life.
In conclusion, I believe that life in a big city is much preferable to a small village. This is because of developed infrastructure of public transport and availability of medical help.
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