Could you please check my writing? (part 1)
It's just a simple synopsis of a few chapters from Satori by Don Winslow for my next lesson.
So, in the previous chapter Nicholai was jealous Solange of the emperor Bao Dai and he deliberately insulted Bao Dao by making some obvious hints that the emperor was only a puppet in the current political environment. Bao Dai was furious, but tried to hide that and offered Nicholai to join him in a private poker game with no limits stakes. Nicholai agreed to play with him.
So, in chapter 118 Nicholai, Bao Dai, Bay Vien, Haverford and Signavi played poker.
Solange was also here. She tried to look calm and indifferent. She ignored Nicholai, didn't pay to him any attention. But Nicholai saw that she was angry.
There was a lot of card's stuff I don't know because I don't play cards.
But the main game was between Nicholai and the emperor.
Nicholai found the game really simple and boring. He won a lot of money.
Then the emperor offered to play the last round with a very high stake. He made it deliberately. Nicholai didn't have so much money and he was ready to give up and leave.
But Bay Vien said that Nicholai had enough credit to make this bid.
Nicholai won.
Chapter 119.
De Lhandes congratuled Nicholai.
Nicholai became famous, all people talked about him.
Bay Vien offered Nicholai to arrage security for his money. Nicholai agreed.
Haverford arranged a meeting the next day.
The emperor and Solange left the casino.
Nicholai and De Lhandes went in the luxury brothel.
Nicholai offered De Lhandes to pay for everything.
De Lhandes chose two women.
Nicholai chose a Chinese girl.
He didn't have sex with her.
He asked her to talk to him instead.
He thought about Solange.
Nicholai met De Lhandes and said that he wanted to buy some information.
De Lhandes promised to help him.
Chapter 120.
Solange had sex with Bao Dai.
She didn't like it.
But she pretended that she liked it.
Bao Dai was jealous of that Guibert.
Solange reassured him.
Bao Dai ordered to kill Nicholai.
Chapter 121.
Nicholai evaluated his position
He had a lot things to think about.
He went to sleep.
Chapter 122.
Nicholai had breakfast.
De Lhandes come and took him in other place.
De Lhandes brought the information Nicholai had asked about.
De Lhandes refused to take money from Nicholai.
Nicholai thought that De Lhandes became his friend.
Bay Vien met Nicholai and took him to the bank.
Bay Vien strictly advised Nicholai to leave.
They arrived to the bank.
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Could you please check my writing? (part 1)
It's just a simple synopsis of a few chapters from Satori by Don Winslow for my next lesson.
So, in the previous chapter Nicholai was jealous Solange of the emperor Bao Dai (I didn’t understand this. Is Nicholas jealous of Bao Dai or of Solange?) and he deliberately insulted Bao Dao by making some obvious hints that the emperor was only a puppet in the current political environment. Bao Dai was furious, but tried to hide that it and offered (“Invited” might be a better word) Nicholai to join him in a private poker game with no limits limitless stakes. Nicholai agreed to play with him.
So, in chapter 118, Nicholai, Bao Dai, Bay Vien, Haverford and Signavi played poker.
Solange was also here. She tried to look calm and indifferent. She ignored Nicholai, didn't pay to him any attention. But Nicholai saw that she was angry.
There was a lot of card's stuff I don't know (“understand” would sound better) because I don't play cards.
But the main game was between Nicholai and the emperor.
Nicholai found the game really simple and boring. He won a lot of money.
Then the emperor offered to play the last round with a very high stake. He made it deliberately. Nicholai didn't have so much money and he was ready to give up and leave.
But Bay Vien said that Nicholai had enough credit to make this bid.
Nicholai won.
Chapter 119.
De Lhandes congratuled Nicholai.
Nicholai became famous, all people “everyone” or “everybody” talked about him.
Bay Vien offered Nicholai to arrange security for his money. Nicholai agreed.
Haverford arranged a meeting the next day.
The emperor and Solange left the casino.
Nicholai and De Lhandes went in the luxury brothel.
Nicholai offered De Lhandes to pay for everything. (I assume you mean Nicholai offered to pay, no that he asked De Lhandes to pay.)
De Lhandes chose two women.
Nicholai chose a Chinese girl.
He didn't have sex with her.
He asked her to talk to him instead.
He thought about Solange.
Nicholai met De Lhandes and said that he wanted to buy some information.
De Lhandes promised to help him.
Chapter 120.
Solange had sex with Bao Dai.
She didn't like it.
But she pretended that she liked it.
Bao Dai was jealous of that Guibert.
Solange reassured him.
Bao Dai ordered to kill Nicholai.
Chapter 121.
Nicholai evaluated his position
He had a lot things to think about.
He went to sleep.
Chapter 122.
Nicholai had breakfast.
De Lhandes come and took him in other to another place.
De Lhandes brought the information Nicholai had asked about.
De Lhandes refused to take money from Nicholai.
Nicholai thought that De Lhandes became his friend.
Bay Vien met Nicholai and took him to the bank.
Bay Vien strictly advised Nicholai to leave.
They arrived to the bank.
Tatyana, great job on your text! Reading a book and summarizing what you read is a GREAT way to practice new vocabulary and writing skills, yet not many people on italki do it. Keep up the great work!
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