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A Magical Day This morning i yet didn't know what I wanted to write ,so I decided to wait . I always hold the idea that I won't be reluctant to write until there's really something needed (to write). Magically, there's really something wonderful happened after about half of day. However ,i didn't know they would happen in the morning . And now they have already gone and become to be my memories forever. But i can record it . These words i write down seem keep longer than the moment when these things happened. This afternoon ,my aunt came to my home . When she entered the gate, i didn't know because i stayed in my own room with door closed. Then mom knocked my door and told me my aunt's visitation . i came out with expectation and thought she was in the living room. However ,when i just took one step out of my door, she suddenly appeared in front of my face with a loud 'wow'. I was frightened and back off speedily but also greatly surprised. She bought some cakes for me .They tasted fluffy and palatable. I felt happy because it was a late birthday cake. Several days ago, it was my birthday, my aunt was very busy for work and couldn't have time to celebrate my birthday with me. In spite of this ,she still didn't forget my birthday and promised to compensate by some cakes. That makes me feel touched and is really worth a record.

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A Magical Day

This morning i yet didn't know what I wanted to write ,so I decided to wait . I always hold the idea that I won't be reluctant to write until there's really something needed (to write).
Magically, there's really something wonderful happened after about half of day. However ,i didn't know they would happen in the morning . And now they have already gone and become to be my memories forever. But i can record it . These words i write down seem keep longer than the moment when these things happened.
This afternoon ,my aunt came to my home . When she entered the gate, i didn't know because i stayed in my own room with door closed. Then mom knocked my door and told me my aunt's visitation . i came out with expectation and thought she was in the living room. However ,when i just took one step out of my door, she suddenly appeared in front of my face with a loud 'wow'. I was frightened and back off speedily but also greatly surprised. She bought some cakes for me .They tasted fluffy and palatable. I felt happy because it was a late birthday cake. Several days ago, it was my birthday, my aunt was very busy for work and couldn't have time to celebrate my birthday with me. In spite of this ,she still didn't forget my birthday and promised to compensate by some cakes.
That makes me feel touched and is really worth a record.



A Magical Day

This morning I yet didn't know what I wanted to write, so I decided to wait . I always hold the idea that I won't be reluctant to write until there's really something needed (to write).
Magically, there's really something really wonderful happened after about half of a day. However, I didn't know they it would happen in the morning. And now they have already gone and become to be my memories forever. But I can record it . These words I write down seem keep to take longer than the moment when these things happened.
This afternoon, my aunt came to my home. When she entered the gate, I didn't know because I stayed in my own room with door closed. Then mom knocked on my door and told me my about aunt's visitation. I came out with expectation and thought she was in the living room. However, when I just took one step out of my door she suddenly appeared in front of my face with a loud 'wow'. I was frightened and backed off speedily but I was also greatly surprised. She bought some cakes for me. They tasted fluffy and palatable. I felt happy because it was a late birthday cake. Several days ago it was my birthday,. My aunt was very busy for with work and couldn't didn't have time to celebrate my birthday with me. In spite of this, she still didn't forget my birthday and promised to compensate by with some cakes.
That makes me feel touched and is really worth a record recording.

Well done Cindy! It was all understandable. The biggest thing I saw here is to remember to capitalize i to I. In english we always capitalize it no matter where in the sentence it is. Also, you are finding some good use of punctuation just remember that the space goes after periods and commas not before. Really great job! Keep writing!

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