My Lover
In 2017,I met him for the first time when I went to the liberal arts class.We became classmates.At that time,we seldom talked and knew little about each other.So I always believed that fate is a wonderful thing.The right people will finally have a happy ending sooner or later.
When we were senior in hign school,we all were under heavy pressure.Just because of a casual chat about something distant,I found we can relate to many things.We shared our own feelings with each other to have a relax.During my dull yet stressful life,even now,he is my spiritual sustenance.For me,He is the light to the night.
In 2019,we fell in love.So far,we've been together for over a year.I'm deeply in love with him,past,present and future.We're going through a long-distance military relationship.I konw it's not easy,but I have faith in him and myself.A sentense I like very much is "I can't stop myself from falling into secularity,but romance doesn't die".
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My Lover
In 2017,I met him for the first time when I went to the liberal arts class.We became classmates.At that time,we seldom talked and knew little about each other.So I always believed that fate is a wonderful thing.The right people will finally have a happy ending at any moment.
When we were seniors in high school,we all were under heavy pressure.Just because of a casual chat about something unknown,I found we can relate to many things.We shared our own feelings with each other to have a relax.During my dull and stressful life,even now,he is my spiritual sustenance.For me, he is the light to in the night.
In 2019,we fell in love.So far,we've been together for over a year.I'm deeply in love with him,past,present and future.We're going through a long-distance military relationship.I know it's not easy,but I have faith in him and myself.I like a sentense very much that is A sentence I like very much is "I can't stop myself from falling into secularity,but romance doesn't die".
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Great work! I've corrected a few minor spelling and grammar errors in green. I don't understand the meaning of the sentences in yellow -
The right people will finally have a happy ending at any moment. - "finally" and "at any moment" convey opposing ideas. "finally" means something happens after a long time, while "at any moment" means something happens instantly. I don't understand how these concepts are connected. For example "If the two right people meet, they can start their journey towards a happy ending at any moment" - but, I'm not sure if this is what you meant.
because of a casual chat about something unknown - "unknown" here is awkward - who doesn't know it?
dull and stressful - in general, these words are opposing concepts - dull means boring, stressful means difficult because of pressure. So, "and" alone is an unnatural way to connect these ideas. Maybe, "dull, yet stressful"
"I can't stop myself from falling into secularity, but romance doesn't die" - I like this sentence too, but I'm not sure I understand it. I guess, you've lost your faith in religion, but not in your love? I think while this is a correct sentence, it's a bit obscure in meaning so it would be worth explaining. Nothing else in this essay refers to secularity or religion, so it's hard to understand.
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