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My Life in Hanoi I have lived in Hanoi for three year since I was a freshman at university. The city’s life is so different from one in rural. Before I moved to Hanoi, I have lived in rural for 17 years with my family. The rural’s life is so serene with gentle breeze, charming meadow and pleasant people. Since I started a city life, it has been a shock, I could not cross the road myself. Hanoi is animated place with high living standard. If you want to buy something, you must consider the price carefully or you will buy it with high price and I am not a good bargainer. People in Hanoi get high salary than in rural, but they are under a lot of pressure, such as working deadline, accommodation rent, food price…On average, I need 3 million VND per month to cover my life. I feel life here is quite tiring with work and often stressful.  In the morning, traffic congestion is always in make people feel tired to get to their destination. In summer, the temperature rising from 33- 36 Celsius degree together with populated air caused by car emission. During that time, going out seems to be extremely difficult. On the other hand, living in Hanoi also has many advantages. In city, there are also a lot of entertainement center, people can go to there to relax after working, studing hard Ha Noi is famous for it is landmarks such as many skyscrapers, Ba Dinh Square – Uncle Ho’s mausoleum, the old town or the big church. It is also well-known for delicious food, of course! I like walking around the old quarters in Hanoi, drinking coffee or drinking beer on Ta Hien every weekend with friends, it is quite interesting. If I had a choice, I would go home to live with my family. But life does not have many options, so I will try to accomplish the goal set since I arrived in Hanoi.

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My Life in Hanoi

I have lived in Hanoi for three years since I was a freshman at university. City life is so different from rural life/ life in the country. Before I moved to Hanoi, I lived in the country for 17 years with my family. The rural/ country life is so serene with gentle breezes, charming meadows, and pleasant people. Since I started living in the city, it has been a shock. I could not cross the road myself. (Living in the city has been shocking, I can't even cross the road by myself.)

Hanoi is an animated place with a high living standard (standard of living). If you want to buy something, you must consider the price carefully, or you will spend too much money, and I am not a good bargainer. People in Hanoi get a higher salary than people living in the country, but they are under a lot of pressure, such as working on a deadline, paying high rents, paying more for food, etc. …On average, I need 3 million VND per month to cover my life/ expenses. I feel life here is quite tiring with work and often stressful. 
In the mornings, traffic is always congested, making people feel tired before they get to their destinations. In summer, the temperature rises to 33- 36 degrees Celsius. That, together with polluted air caused by car emission, makes going out during that time seem extremely difficult.

On the other hand, living in Hanoi also has many advantages. In the city, there are also a lot of entertainment centers. People can go there to relax after working or studying hard.
Hanoi is famous for its landmarks, such as many skyscrapers, Ba Dinh Square – Uncle Ho's mausoleum, the old town, or the big church. It is also well-known for delicious food, of course! I like walking around the old quarters in Hanoi, drinking coffee, or drinking beer on Ta Hien every weekend with friends. It is quite interesting/fun.
If I had a choice, I would go home to live with my family. But life does not have many options (there are not many options in life), so I will try to accomplish the goal I set when I arrived in Hanoi.

*I added a few re-phrasing suggestions in parentheses, but overall well done!*
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1.The city’s life is so different from one in rural.
Life doesn't go with "the" in this situation. Or if you want to say "Cuộc sống thật hạnh phúc." in English, it should be "Life is so happy." Remember, "Life" without "the".

2.Before I moved to Hanoi, I have lived in rural for 17 years with my family.
Rural is an adjective, not a noun. So it's better for you to say "in a rural area" or "in the country/ countryside"

3.The rural’s life is so serene with gentle breeze, charming meadow and pleasant people. Since I started a city life, it has been a shock, I could not cross the road myself.
The rural/ country life

If I had a choice, I would go home to live with my family. But life does not have many options, so I will try to accomplish the goal set since when I arrived in Hanoi.
(I really like the way you end your writing, Cookoo.)
P/s: "there are not many options in life" sounds more natural than "life does not have many options".

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