English writing practice (14 July)
1. The social benefits pertains only to residents who's income is less than average of all people.
2. We should delve into the biography of painter before visiting his exhibition.
3. With the help of technology, steering the car into a parking space becomes easier than before.
4. Some banks waive their loan interest to small business during the coronavirus outbreak.
5. Most people are supposedly need to take the vaccine of the coronavirus.
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1. The social benefits pertainsapply only to residents who'swhose income is less than the population's average of all people.
Comments:
(A) "Pertains" is used in a similar way to "relates to". In the context of social benefits, "apply" is more appropriate. As a secondary point, since "social benefits" is plural, the appropriate form should be "pertain".
(B) "who's" is a contraction of "who is" and is incorrect in this case.
(C) The phrase "average of all people" is a little clumsy, but understandable. The correction would be a more commonly used term. That said, the reference to "all people" or "population" may be excluded since "less than the average" would be understood to refer to the country's average income across its population.
2. We should delve into the biography of a painter before visiting his exhibition.
3. With the help of technology, steering thea car into a parking space has becomes easier than before.
Comments:
(A) Since it is a idea of a car rather than a specific car you're referring to, "a" should be used instead of "the".
(B) I'm not sure if your intention is to use the simple present tense - if so, then the remainder of the sentence can be written as "steering a car into a parking space is now easier than before.".
(C) For brevity, you may wish to consider simply using "parking a car" rather than "steering a car into a parking space", since the former is more consistent with common usage and conveys the meaning of the latter.
4. Some banks waive their loan interest tofor small businesses during the coronavirus outbreak.
Comments:
(A) Although it is typically understood that the relationship between banks and small businesses are that of lendor and borrower such that the loan interest is to be paid by the small business, the use of "their" can be seen to introduce some uncertainty. Accordingly, you may wish to consider alternative phrasing such as "Some banks waive the interest on their loans to small businesses". As a further point, since the act of waiver is an ongoing action, you may wish to consider altering the tense - for example, "Some banks are waiving the interest on loans [...]" (i.e. present continuous) or "Some banks have waived the interest on loans [...]" (i.e. past) depending on what you intend to convey.
5. Most people are supposedlywill need to take the coronavirus vaccine of the coronavirus.
Comments:
(A) I'm not too sure what you mean by "supposedly" here. Are you trying to convey that most people will need to take the vaccine? If what you meant is something different, please feel free to let me know and I can propose a revised correction.
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