The right place at the right time
I'll be very grateful if someone could help me correct this text. Thank you :)
I took this photo in Vernazza, a popular destination in Cinque Terre. As a street photographer, I was probably the only person in the area to welcome with enthusiasm the rain that had started to fall heavily. All the colourful rain capes that instantly popped out all around were a fascinating show to watch. My attention was quickly caught by a family going down a slippery slope very carefully, in single line. Suddenly, the eye catching scene took an unexpected comical turn when the boy of the family located between his two sisters and his parents - probably not helped by the wind in his defence - mishandled his blue rain cape which ended covering entirely his face. I pressed the shutter in a mix of surprise, excitement and fear to miss this unique opportunity. Today I look at this photo with a great affection for this sweet family scene but also as reminder to always be curious and excited by what's coming next, because you'll never know if the right place at the right time won't be there, right now, at the next corner.
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The right place at the right time
I would be very grateful if someone could help me correct this text. Thank you :)
I took this photo in Vernazza, a popular destination in Cinque Terre. As a street photographer, I was probably the only person in the area to enthusiastically welcome the rain that had started falling heavily. All the colourful rain capes that bloomed instantly all around were a fascinating show to watch. My attention was quickly drawn by a family going down a slippery slope very carefully, in single file*. Suddenly, the eye catching scene took an unexpected comical turn when the boy of the family, walking between his two sisters and parents, - probably not helped by a headwind** - mishandled his blue rain cape which ended up covering entirely his face. I pressed the shutter in a mix of surprise, excitement and fear not to miss this unique opportunity. Today I look at this photo with great affection for this sweet family scene but also as reminder to always be curious and excited by what's coming next, because you never know if the right place at the right time won't be there, right now, at the next corner.
*or, Indian file (le même chose en français?).
**or backwind? Head- blows into their face. Back- blows in the opposite direction. The wind bloweth where it listeth. What became of the wind that blew our first shirt dry?
Very well written whimsy. (Incidentally, is there an accompanying photo to your story?)
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The right place at the right time
I'll be very grateful if someone could help me correct this text. Thank you :)
I took this photo in Vernazza, a popular destination in Cinque Terre. As a street photographer, I was probably the only person in the area to welcome with enthusiasm the rain that had started to fall heavily. All the colourful rain capes (umbrellas?) that instantly popped out all around were a fascinating show to watch. My attention was quickly caught by a family going down a slippery slope very carefully, in a single line (or "in single file"). Suddenly, the eye-catching scene took an unexpected comical turn when the boy in the family, positioned between his two sisters and his parents - probably not helped by the wind, in his defence - mishandled his blue rain cape (again, probably "umbrella") which ended up entirely covering his face. I pressed the shutter in a mix of surprise, excitement, and fear of missing this unique opportunity. Today I look at this photo with a great affection for this sweet family scene, but also as reminder to always be curious and excited by what's coming next, because you never know when you'll find yourself at the right place at the right time. It could be here, right now, around the next corner.
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Hi Sylvain, really, really good job. You're a very good writer :) That's awesome that you're a photographer.
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