My first time in Greece
as soon as I stepped off the plane I was assailed by a sense of fragrance: the country I had so long yearned for was there, in front of me; the soil once trodden by Minos, Theseus and Ariadne was under my feet.
I felt surrounded by histroy, as if the past had survived up to that moment or had come back to life.
I was noticeably indulging in that sweet sensation long waited for.
The mountains were dry, burning in the dazzling light of midday. the rugged natural beauty of the location was a sight itself.
I was smitten with the colours, the scents of dry herbs, the sea unfathomable shades of light.
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Manuela, your prose is too good and in fact poetic for me to offer a correction, other than to point out what I assume is a typo of the word "history." As suggestions more editorial than grammatical, I offer these:
1. ...that sweet sensation long awaited. It just sounds better
2. the rugged natural beauty of the location was a sight unto itself.
3. I wonder if "noticeably" is the best word here. It suggests that other people could notice your indulgence. Perhaps "consciously"? or "I noticed myself indulging."
In any case, keep up your writing. My compliments.
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Sheila,
I really appreciate your help and your suggestions.
I was impressed by your compliments! I thank you so much!!
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