Graduation ceremony (am I correct?)
Graduation ceremony is a milestone of our life. Namely, it is the end of one stage of my life and the beginning of another.
After studying hard for years, we finally eared the diploma, it is a day for us to celebrate instead of just immersed ourselves in the atmosphere of sorrow.
All we can do is to express your gratitude to teachers and students whom accompanied you through the delight, sorrow, and meaningful time in school and value the last time in school.
Graduation ceremonies in differ from school to school.If I were in charge of this ceremony,I’ll hold it between formality and informality.
First of all, holding a dance party as starters, everyone can immersed themselves in this atmosphere of joyous.
After this, projecting a video on the screen, this is meant to let them memory their commonmemories in school, including the things they made together, the activities they attended together and the the games they played together.
And short time of principal delivering of a speech, we’ll sing the graduation songs as an end.
I guarantee it would be the most memorable ceremonies in the graduate mind.
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Graduation ceremony (am I correct?) Yes, you are.
A graduation ceremony is a milestone of in our lives. Namely, it is the end of one stage of my life and the beginning of another.
After studying hard for years, we have finally earned the a diploma. It is a day for us to celebrate instead of just immersed ourselves in the atmosphere of sorrow.
I'm not quite sure what you mean here. Do you mean "it's a time to celebrate and be happy". I suppose I don't understand why you would be sad?
All we can do is to express your gratitude to the teachers and students whom accompanied you us through the delight, the sorrow, and the meaningful times in school and value the last time in school and enjoy our final time together.
Graduation ceremonies in differ from school to school.If I were in charge of this ceremony,I’ll I'd (I'd = I would. You are saying what you WOULD do IF you were in charge) hold keep it somewhere between formality and informality .
First of all, holding a dance at the start. party as starters, Everyone can immersed themselves in this atmosphere of joyous atmosphere.
After this, projecting I would project a video on the screen, this is meant to let them memory their commonmemories in share their memories of school, including the things they made did together, the activities they attended together and the the games they played together.
What you have written here is fine, but you don't need "together" after each verb. You could say "including the things they did, the activities they attended and the games they played together".
I guarantee it would be the most memorable ceremony in the graduates minds. (or "I guarantee that it would be a ceremony the graduates would never forget")
Really good. Everything that you wrote makes sense and you've done a good job of writing conditionally.
Sometimes you change from talking about something "I" - singular - do, to something "we" - plural - do. An example is:
"All we can do is express your gratitude to the teachers and students who accompanied you"
You start with "we" and change to "your" and "you". You should either use "we" "our" and "us", or "you" "your" and "you", but you shouldn't mix them.
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A nice essay...... just take a little more time to check it, when you write.
Graduation ceremony (am I correct?)
Graduation ceremony is a milestone of our life. Namely, it is the end of one stage of my life and the beginning of another.
After studying hard for years, we finally eared the diploma, it is a day for us to celebrate instead of just immersed immersing ourselves in the atmosphere of sorrow.
All we can do is to express your our gratitude to teachers and students whom accompanied you us through the delight, sorrow, and meaningful time in school and value the last time in school.
Graduation ceremonies in differ from school to school.If I were in charge of this ceremony,I’ll I'd hold it between formality and informality.
First of all, holding a dance party as starters, everyone can immersed themselves in this atmosphere of joyous celebrations
After this, projecting a video on the screen, this is meant to let them memory remember their commonmemories in school, including the things they made together, the activities they attended together and the the games they played together.
And short time of principal delivering of a speech, we’ll sing the graduation songs as an end.
I guarantee it would be the most memorable ceremonies in the graduate mind.
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