Family.
No one will take care of you like your family! It’s your safe haven, your trusted circle! It will not let you down or break you up anymore! Family teaches you many valuable things such as when a mother sacrifice her own ambitions to help her children in achieving their ambitions. When a father work hard to provide a happy and comfortable life for his family. When the siblings support each other every now and then! I don’t and won’t forget that night when my dad has stayed awake looking for unimportant stuff I ordered from him, or when my mom knew what I feel even if I tried to hide these feelings! It seems ridiculous but these small actions make me cry and thank god for my family! Believe me, every person in your life may change except your family! They always by your side and forever.
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Family.
No one will take care of you like your family will! It’s your safe haven, your trusted circle! It will not let you down or break you up anymore! Family teaches you many valuable things such as when a mother sacrifices her own ambitions to help her children in achieving achieve their ambitions. When a father works hard to provide a happy and comfortable life for his family. When the siblings support each other every now and then! I don’t and won’t forget that night when my dad has stayed awake looking for unimportant stuff I ordered from him (not very clear what you mean by ordered from), or when my mom knew what I feel was feeling even if I tried to hide these feelings from her ! It seems ridiculous but these small actions make me cry and thank god for my family! Believe me, every person in your life may change except your family! [... person in your life may come and go except ...] They will always be by your side and forever. (I feel 'forever. is redundant since you already said 'always.' I would choose one or the other)
Great writing, very good content. Keep it up.
In blue are suggestions only. Few things to note :
A mother sacrifices... / mothers sacrifice ....
A father works hard ... / fathers work hard ...
# I don’t and won’t forget ... : I have seen people write this way and it looks good. If they can both stand independently, then it is fine. For example "I won't forget ....," this sounds good. But, "I don't forget ..." this is incorrect. So I prefer not to use this style of writing here.
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