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Someone help me please Hi, I'm new here. I need help about this my introduction: I'm brazilian and I congregate in the Christian Congregation in the Brazil. I majored in management. I'm currently learning english. I wanna meet new friends, meet new cultures and ideas.

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Someone help me please

Hi, I'm new here. I need help about this with my introduction: I'm brazilian and I congregate in am a member of the Christian Congregation in the Brazil. I majored in management. I'm currently learning English. I wanna want to meet new friends, and explore meet new cultures and ideas.
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Hey Lídia! Welcome to the italki community! You did a great job introducing yourself, but let me help you make a few corrections. First, I'm going to break down your paragraph and show you the corrections, then I'm going to re-write the paragraph with the corrections included:

Hi, I'm new here. I need help about this my introduction.
Option 1: I need help with this introduction
Option 2: I need help with my introduction

I'm brazilian Brazilian In English, we capitalize nationalities.

and I congregate in the Christian Congregation in the Brazil. "Congregate" means "to gather" and isn't a common word to use with this context, so here are some better word choices:
Option 1: and I worship at the Christian Congregation in Brazil
Option 2: and I am a member of the Christian Congregation in Brazil

I majored in management. I'm currently learning english English. In English, we capitalize languages.

I wanna meet new friends... "Wanna" is commonly used as spoken slang in the US during informal conversations with friends and family, but is NOT generally accepted as a written word in either formal or informal writing. If sending a text message to a friend, for example, you can get away with it, but generally speaking, you should always avoid writing the word "wanna" and stick to "want to."

meet new cultures and ideas. Since you can't meet ideas, you will need to add a new verb before the word "ideas." Here are some options:
Option 1: meet new cultures and share ideas.
Option 2: meet new cultures and learn about different ideas.
Option 3: meet new cultures and experience new ideas.

So now I'm going to show you one way to rewrite your paragraph:

Hi, I'm new here. I need help with my introduction: I'm Brazilian and I attend the Christian Congregation in Brazil. I majored in management. I'm currently learning English. I want to meet new friends, meet new cultures and share ideas.

It's nice to meet you Lídia!
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Hi Rich Latham, thanks for your help!
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You can say the following: I'm Brazilian and I am a member of the Christian Congregation in Brazil. I majored in management. I'm currently learning English. I wanna meet new friends, experience new cultures and ideas.

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