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I live in Russia. I have enough money to not worry about it. I have two sons and a wife. I have a car and a house. I must be happy they think. Why am I writing? To order my thoughts. From what should I start? Let's start from the beginning.
I was born in usual family. My mother was a seamstress and father was electrician (really he was a control man but I am not sure that I translate it right).
I was a second child in the family. I have younger sister and older brother. When I come to this world I had some problem and doctors made transfusion of blood. Eventually I survived.
When I was 4 years old and I fell from the roof in winter from about 2.5 meters. I fell on ice but did not broke any bones. I lost my mind for a while. Doctor desided to send me to the hospital to watch at me for some time. To be continued.
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The beginning
I live in Russia. I have enough money to not worry about it. I have two sons and a wife. I have a car and a house. I must be happy they think. Why am I writing? To order my thoughts. From what Where should I start? Let's start from the beginning.
I was born into a typical working-class usual family. My mother was a seamstress and my father was an electrician (really he was a control man but I am not sure that I translated it right).
I was a the second child in the family. I have a younger sister and an older brother. When I came into this world I had some medical problems and doctors made gave me blood transfusions. (or "I had some medical problems that required blood transfusions") of blood. Eventually I survived.
When I was 4 years old and I fell from the roof in one winter from a height of about 2.5 meters. I fell on ice but did not broke break any bones. I lost my mind for a while. The doctor decided to send keep me to in the hospital to [watch at me for some time.] ( "to keep me in the hospital for observation for a few days.")
To be continued.
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The beginning
I live in Russia. I have enough money to not worry about it. I have two sons and a wife. I have a car and a house. I must be happy they think. Why am I writing? To order my thoughts. From what where should I start? Let's start from the beginning.
I was born in a usual family. (<--- Вы также можете сказать "a normal family")
My mother was a seamstress and father was an electrician (really he was a control man but I am not sure that I translated it right).
I was a the second child in the family. I have a younger sister and an older brother.
When I come came into this world I had some problems and doctors made a transfusion of blood. Eventually I survived.
When I was 4 years old, and I fell from the roof in winter from about 2.5 meters. I fell on ice but did not broke brake any bones. I lost my mind for a while. Doctor desided decided to send me to the hospital to watch at me for some time. To be continued.
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