The importance of public parks - pls review it!
Public parks can be found in almost every city and as the adjective marks, they are allowed to be visited by anyone for free. However, some people argue that these parks should be closed and replaced with buildings in order to produce more space for work and for living. In my opinion, preservation of green areas in cities is essential.
It is common that people walking around, playing with their children, having a nap or doing exercise in parks. Even if they are not aware of it, people need to spend time in nature. One reason for this is the fact that spending time in the nature is healthy for the whole human being including the soul as well. Without place to go to be refreshed, general health conditions deteriorate.
Another point worth mentioning is the ecosystem. Although it is not visible, environmental cycles such as carbon and water cycles, are constantly happening giving to the parks important roles in them. Consequently, ecosystem suffers serious damage, at the event of making every large green area vanished from the cities.
Others, however, would argue that parks should be used to decrease the poverty which is currently on the rise. Since people have the opportunity to enjoy the nature, they are still unhappy and unhealthy due to the poor daily intake.
Again, some others prefer to turn the parks into houses with a view to provide more space for the young to live. They claim that economy and the high standard of living rely on them, thus government should help them.
At this point, it is necessary to mention one of the long-term effects of destruction of environment. Famine. By destructing the parks and replecing them with buildings, ecosystem deteriorates and becomes unable to provide for goods, such as crops, fruits or vegetables. People would be poorer than now and the extent of poverty would be increased.
Referring to the other argument, the more of houses, the more congested are the cities. Cities filled with people are not hygienic and people who live in feel more stressed and unhappy. This is the reason why people are moving into the countryside nowadays.
In conclusion, life is better in those cities which include parks. People are more healthy and the ecosystem thrives.
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The importance of public parks - pls review it!
Public parks can be found in almost every city and as the adjective indicates, they can be visited by anyone for free. However, some people argue that these parks should be closed and replaced with buildings in order to produce more space for work and for living. In my opinion, preservation of green areas in cities is essential.
There are usually people walking around, playing with their children, having a nap or doing exercising in parks. Even if they are not aware of it, people need to spend time in nature. One reason for this is the fact that spending time in the nature is healthy for the whole human being including the soul as well. Without a place (or places) to go to be refreshed, general health conditions deteriorate.
Another point worth mentioning is the ecosystem. Although they are not visible, environmental cycles such as carbon and water cycles, are constantly happening, giving them important roles in the parks. Consequently, the ecosystem suffers serious damage, in the event of making every large green area vanished from the cities.
Others, however, would argue that parks should be used to decrease the poverty which is currently on the rise. Even though people have the opportunity to enjoy the nature, they are still unhappy and unhealthy due to the poor daily intake.
Again, some others prefer to turn the parks into houses with a view to provide more space for the young to live. They claim that the economy and the high standard of living rely (or depend) on them, so government should help them.
At this point, it is necessary to mention one of the long-term effects of destruction of the environment: famine. By destroying the parks and replacing them with buildings, the ecosystem deteriorates and becomes unable to provide for goods, such as crops, fruits or vegetables. People would be poorer than now and the extent of poverty would be increased.
Referring to the other argument, the more of houses, the more congested are the cities. Cities filled with people are not hygienic and people who live in them feel more stressed and unhappy. This is the reason why people are moving into the countryside nowadays.
In conclusion, life is better in those cities that include parks. People are more healthy and the ecosystem thrives.
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Excellent job Tamás.
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