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I wrote a text and I would like some correction. Can you check it for me? Once upon a time an egret that was always strolling on a huge lake. She used to catch fishes and eat them. But she got old and couldn’t catch fishes as she did before. And she ended up don’t eating for many days. Then she thought: ‘’I need to think in a plan or I will starve.’’ The egret landed beside the water seeming depressed and thoughtful. At the same lake lived a very sympathetic crab and the crab soon asked: ‘’Why are you sad, egret?’’ ‘’What I can say’’, said the egret with a sad voice. ‘’something terrible will happen.’’ ‘’Really? And what it is?’’ Asked the crab. ‘’Today morning I heard an astrologer saying that there would no be rains in the areas for the next twelve years. The lake will dry and all of us will die’’, said the egret. The scary crab ran to the fishes on the lake and told them the news! All of them was terrified! ‘’There’s a huge lake in a same distance from here. I can take all of you there one by one!’’, offered the egret. The fishes agreed at the same moment! That way, every day the egret flied with the fishes one by one, but instead of taking them to the lake she ate them. Some days later, the crab walked up to the egret. ‘’Have you been taken the fishes to the other side of the lake?’’. The egret thought at the same time: ‘’I’m tired of eating fishes. Crab meat should be a pleasant change’’. The egret agreed on taking the crab to the other side of the lake. But the crab was very big for the egret to bear in its beak. Then the crab got on the egret’s back and they started the journey. After some time, the crab was impatient. ‘’At what distance is the lake?’’ Asked the crab. ‘’You’re a fool’’, laughed the egret. ‘’I won’t take you for any lake at all. I’ll toss you against these stones and eat you as I did with all those fishes.’’ ‘’I’m not a fool to permit you to kill me’’, said the crab. He grabbed the egret with his powerful claws and choked it.

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I wrote a text and I would like some correction. Can you check it for me?

Once upon a time there was an egret that was always strolling on a huge lake. She used to catch fish and eat them. But she got old and couldn’t catch fish as she did before. And she ended up not eating for many days. Then she thought:
‘’I need to think of a plan or I will starve.’’
The egret landed beside the water seeming depressed and full of thought. At the same lake, there lived a very sympathetic crab and the crab soon asked:
‘’Why are you sad, egret?’’
‘’What can I say’’, said the egret with a sad voice. ‘’something terrible will happen.’’
‘’Really? And what is it?’’ Asked the crab.
‘’This morning I heard an astrologer saying that there would be no rains in the areas for the next twelve years. The lake will dry up and all of us will die’’, said the egret.
The scary crab ran to the fish on the lake and told them the news!
All of them were terrified!
‘’There’s a huge lake the same distance from here. I can take all of you there one by one!’’, offered the egret. The fish agreed at the same moment!
That way, every day the egret flew with the fish one by one, but instead of taking them to the lake she ate them.
Some days later, the crab walked up to the egret.
‘’Have you been taking the fish to the other side of the lake?’’.
The egret thought at the same time: ‘’I’m tired of eating fish. Crab meat should be a pleasant change’’.
The egret agreed on taking the crab to the other side of the lake. But the crab was very big for the egret to bear in its beak. Then the crab got on the egret’s back and they started the journey. After some time, the crab was impatient.
‘’At what distance is the lake?’’ Asked the crab.
‘’You’re a fool’’, laughed the egret. ‘’I won’t take you to any lake. I’ll toss you against these stones and eat you as I did with all those fish.’’
‘’I’m not a fool to permit you to kill me’’, said the crab.
He grabbed the egret with his powerful claws and choked it.
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I did hahaha! You just had a few mistakes, so it doesn’t look like much :)

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