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In recent years,the quantity demands of popular consumer goods is increasing rapidly.Millions of people choose their things by advertising.But they really need these commditiesActually,advertising lead majority of individuals to procurement popular consumer goods that not real needs of customers.
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My 2nd Entry.
In recent years, _the demand for popular consumer goods has increased rapidly.
Millions of people choose their things from what they see on advertising, _ but do they really need these commodities? Actually, _advertising leads the majority of individuals to the procurement of popular consumer goods that they do not really need.
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In recent years, the demand for popular consumer goods has increased rapidly. Millions of people have chosen to buy things based on what they see in advertisements. But, are these commodities what they really need? Advertising has led many consumers to the procurement of popular but unneeded items.
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In recent years, the demand for popular consumer goods has been increasing rapidly.Millions of people have chosen to buy things based on what they see from adverstisements.However, are these commodities what they really need?Advertising has led many consumers to the procurement of popular but not needed goods.
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Yes,thank you!!my awful grammar!!! Kellen,just do more practices,i advise you to study Chinese “拼音（pin ying）"which can help your pronunciation .
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Chen, this is a million times better than my Chinese would be, as you know now :). As a suggestion for structure. The last sentence seems to repeat the content of the second sentence. I only added my correction because, though the others were good, I saw small errors.
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