Cooking during the lockdown
Could you turn in into an advanced paragraph with appropriate words? Thanks in advance
My grandmother is a great amateur cook. She always makes lusciously creamy meals. Nothing can
be compared with my grandmother's cuisine.
My parents follow her recipes, as they get marvellous results, so I decided to jump on the bandwagon and to follow one of her recipes. I chose her apple pie recipe. However, the most difficult thing was getting the ingredients because of the lockdown. I had to wait for a few days until my dad got them all. After that, I could make the dessert and the patience was worth it because I could do a delightful dish.
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Cooking during the lockdown
Could you turn in this into an advanced paragraph with appropriate words*? Thanks in advance
My grandmother is a great amateur cook. She always makes lusciously creamy meals. Nothing can
My parents follow her recipes, as they get marvellous results, so I decided to jump on the bandwagon and to follow one of her recipes. I chose to pay her homage by starting with her signature dish - apple pie recipe. However, the most difficult thing was getting the ingredients because of the lockdown. I had to wait for a few days until my dad got them all. After that, I could make the dessert. and the patience was worth it It was worth the wait because - I've never tasted an apple pie so delicious in my X years on planet Earth! Thanks Grandma!
advanced paragraph with appropriate words: I would say: "Can you turn this paragraph into something spellbinding that makes my readers drool?
getting : For a touch of humour, you could use a verb that means "in seach of something hard to find", "the most difficult thing was sourcing, procuring said ingredients. They're not everyday verbs, but can be sprinkled in for humour.
Hey Sophie, great work! As I saw that you'd already got quite a lot of feedback, I thought I'd offer suggestions as to how I write in a slightly humorous way. I hope that helps, and if you've got any questions, let me know! (Also, if you'd prefer that I correct you in a more normal way, also let me know :) )
Thanks for your corrections!
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Cooking during the lockdown
Could you turn this into an advanced a better paragraph with appropriate words? Thanks in advance
My grandmother is a great amateur cook. (It's more natural to omit 'amateur') She always makes lusciously luscious creamy meals. Nothing can
be compared with my grandmother's cuisine cooking. ('cuisine' is a little too formal when you are referring to home cooking.)
My parents follow her recipes as they get marvellous results. I decided to jump on the bandwagon as well and follow one of her recipes. I chose her apple pie recipe. However, the most difficult thing was getting the ingredients because of the lockdown. I had to wait for a few days until my dad got them all. After that, I could make the dessert and the patience waiting was worth it because I was able to make a delightful great dish.
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Cooking during the lockdown
Could you turn in into an advanced paragraph with advanced words? Thanks in advance
Note: It would sound foolish to use ''advanced'' words when they are not necessary. I would say the same thing to native English speaking students if I were teaching an English class in school. Use the most appropriate words, not ''advanced'' words.
My grandmother is a great amateur cook. She always makes lusciously creamy meals. Nothing can
My parents follow her recipes, as they get marvellous marvelous results, so I decided to jump on the bandwagon and to follow one of her recipes. I chose her apple pie recipe. However, (''however'' feels unnecessary here) The most difficult thing was getting the ingredients because of the lockdown. I had to wait for a few days until (or ''while'') my dad got them all. After that, I could (''I was able to make ...'' sounds more natural) make the dessert and the patience was worth it (''it was worth the wait'') because I could do a delightful dish (<-- Reword this last bit completely. Maybe ''because it was so delicious'')
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Cooking during the lockdown
Could you turn in into an advanced paragraph with appropriate words? Thanks in advance
My grandmother is a great amateur cook. She always makes lusciously creamy meals. Nothing can
be compared with my grandmother's cuisine.
My parents follow her recipes, as they get marvellous results, so I decided to jump on the bandwagon and to follow one of her recipes. I chose her apple pie recipe. However, the most difficult thing was getting the ingredients because of the lockdown. I had to wait for a few days until my dad got them all. After that, I could make the dessert and the waiting was worth it because I could make a delightful dish.
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Thanks in advance
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