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Nowadays, more and more people living in countryside are transfer to cities. They may believe that they will be more easily to access to a job in the city, and city living are more comfortable than the countryside’s, but it is notable that this tendency may cause some adverse impacts.
There are two main reasons why these people used to choose living in the city. Firstly, the density of city’s population is more large, and cities can provide more working opportunities, people who living in the city are relatively obtain much higher income than others living in country. This means that the people can buy more production with their life standard rising. By contrast, in the rural area ,the job opportunity are rare, as many business are underdeveloped and the residents’ ability to consume is limited. The other reason is the inhabitants living in cities can more convenient to access public service and also can enjoy better life standard, including education, medical treatment. Therefore, young couple desire get rid of poverty through their children accept better education in the city.
But the city’s population rising will boost pressure for the public facilities and housing supplying. Some cities have not enough land source to accommodate too many people. Many migrant need to living in the slum and tolerate there harsh life condition, because they can not afford for them own house. People will more easily to get sick, due to the city’s facilities can not completely satisfy with supplying of clean water, disposing of household wastes and refining of waste water.
The income gap between urban and rural areas has increased and it is the main reason for countryside migration. Those young man who are ambitious, vigorous, diligent and creative are willing to find jobs or attend school in the city rather than rural area. In this case, it is really hard to prosper rural economics under the problem with lack labor force. But on other hand, some urban youths choose committing crime, because the income gap inside the city.
In conclusion, the depressed future of career and economy in rural area lead the migration. This is a worrying trend.
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Title : Migration.
Nowadays, more and more people living in countryside are moving to cities. They may believe that there will be more access to jobs in the city, and city living is more comfortable than the countryside's, but it is notable that this tendency may cause some adverse impacts.
There are two main reasons why these people chose living in the city. Firstly, large city's population is more dense , and cities can provide more working opportunities. People who live in the city are able to obtain a much higher income than those living in the country. This means that the people can buy more and increase their standard of living. By contrast, in a rural area, job opportunities are rare, as many business are underdeveloped and the residents’ ability to consume is limited. The other reason is the inhabitants living in cities have more convenient to access public services and also can enjoy a better standard of living, including education and medical treatment. Therefore, young couples desire to get rid of poverty through their children by getting them a better education in the city.
But the rise in urban population will increase pressure for the public services and housing supply. Some cities do not have enough land available to accommodate too many people. Many migrants end up living in the slums and suffera harsh way of life because it's not affordable for them own a house. It is easier for people to get sick , because the city’s facilities cannot fully carry out the supplying of clean water, disposing of household wastes, and refining of waste water.
The income gap between urban and rural areas has increased and it is the main reason for countryside migration. Those young men who are ambitious, vigorous, diligent, and creative are willing to find jobs or attend school in the city rather than in a rural area. In this case, it is really hard for rural economies to prosper with a lack of labor force. But on other hand, some urban youths choose a life of crime, because of the income gap inside the city.
In conclusion, the lack of opportunity for employment and economic growth in rural areas lead to migration. This is a worrying trend.
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Phew! That was a long notebook entry. 😂 Honestly, good job for making the effort to write so much about this topic. As you can see, I gave you quite a few corrections, so if there is anything you have questions about feel free to ask me. Happy learning!
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That happened before here. Nowdays they are leaving from cities because of the price.
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