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writing Hello everyone. hipe you are doing good. I have written an english text related to a bar chart. I would appreciate it if you correct me. Thank you so much in advance Overall, the dominance of women in physical activities was prevalent. in the age of 15 to 24 the males proportion in doing works out was higher than women but, this scenario was quite opposite in other age groups. In the first age group, women did less activity than men by approximately 5%. surprisingly, in the next four age groups women overshadowed men significantly. In the age of 25 till 34, the difference was about 6% and the highest difference occured in 35 to 44 where 13 percent more women did work outs. the notable differences were followed in 45to 54 and 55 to 64 by around 10% and 8% respectively. In the last group there was parity between men and women and and only 0.4% more women did physical activity than men.

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Hello everyone. Hope you are all doing good/well. I have written an English text related to a bar chart. I would appreciate it if you correct me. Thank you so much in advance.
Overall, the dominance of women in physical activities was prevalent. In the age of 15 to 24 the males proportion in doing workouts was higher than women but, this scenario was quite opposite in other age groups.
In the first age group, women did less activity than men by approximately 5%. Surprisingly, in the next four age groups women overshadowed men significantly. In the age of 25 to 34, the difference was about 6% and the highest difference occured in 35 to 44 where 13 percent more women did workouts. The notable differences were followed in 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 by around 10% and 8% respectively.
In the last group there was a little distance between men and women and and only 0.4% more women did physical activity than men.
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Hello everyone. hipe you are doing good. I have written an english text related to a bar chart. I would appreciate it if you correct me. Thank you so much in advance
Overall, the dominance of women in physical activities was prevalent. in the age of 15 to 24 the males proportion in doing works out was higher than women the proportion of men aged 15-24 working out was higher than women, but, this scenario was quite opposite trend reversed in other age groups.
In the first age group, women did less activity than men by approximately 5%. Surprisingly, in the next four age groups women overshadowed outperformed men significantly. In Between the ages of 25 till 34 24-34, the difference was about 6% and the highest difference occurred in the 35 to 44 35-44 age group where 13% percent more women did work outs worked out. The notable differences were followed continued in the 45to 54 45-54 and 55 to 64 55-64 age groups by around 10% and 8% respectively.
In the last group there was parity between men and women and and only 0.4% more women did physical activity than men.
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Paris Dorcas Thanks a million. I really appreciate it. It helps me a lot. it was a great correction thanks and sorry less activitied or fewer activities?
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Hey, this is a good attempt :) When you review, I recommend checking your formatting. You want to use women/men or females/males consistently and make sure you either write "percentage" or use the symbol "%" - don't use both.
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O.christie Thank you so much. that was a big help. I am gateful and sorry physical activity or activities?

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