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Body paragraph one for a 1000 word essay The first time writing essay like this, almost dying right now. Someone come help me out heeeeeere... Q-Q ---------------------------------------- The main intention of setting SIS is harm reduction, which basic on the ideal that drug addiction is a serious life threatening illness rather than a criminal (Macdonald 2011). Due to sharing of needles and syringes, the intravenous injection can lead a high possible contagious of HIV and Hepatitis. Thus, SIS provides a safe and hygienic environment which drug users are served sterile equipment to subside transmission of blood borne infections. What more, there are trained medical counselors who can give assistance such as administrating overdoes-reversing medicines to drug users to prevent the fatalities cause by overdoes (Prance 2019). The staff members in SIS also can referrals the drug addicts to access a treatment program or even give welfare information and legal services in the area (Nursing@USC Staff 2019). However, there are opposite concerns about what might affect drug users in SIS. For instance, with a safe and comfortable place to inject, addicts could have become more complacent. SIS might encourage them in the activity instead of serving a deterrent. There are many studies have already shown the positive resorts. The studie about SIS in Vancouver “Insite” has found that 23% of respondents had stopped injecting by the end of the study period, and another 57% had entered addiction treatment (Rourke and Bacon 2014). Also, in the Sydney Medically Supervised injecting Centre in Australia, 16% addicts who received referrals for addiction treatment services confirmed actually participation in addiction treatment programs (Rourke and Bacon 2014). in accordance with these evidences, the outcome of the harm reduction policy is a tremendous success.

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Body paragraph one for a 1000 word essay

The first time writing essay like this, almost dying right now.
Someone come help me out heeeeeere... Q-Q
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The main intention (I think that "purpose" would be better than "intention" here) of setting offering SIS is harm reduction, which is basiced on the ideal that drug addiction is a serious life-threatening illness rather than a crimeinal (or you could say "a criminal act") (Macdonald 2011). Due to sharing of needles and syringes, the intravenous injection can lead to a high possibleility of contagious of HIV and Hhepatitis transmission. Thus, SIS provides a safe and hygienic environment in which drug users are served provided with sterile equipment to subside prevent transmission of bloodborne infections. What moreAdditionally, there are trained medical counselors who can give assistance such as administeringrating overdosees-reversing medicines to drug users to prevent the fatalities cause by overdoesses (Prance 2019). The staff members in at SIS also can referrals the drug addicts to access a treatment programs or even give welfare information and legal service (I think it might be better to say, "or even give social service and legal referrals") s in the area (Nursing@USC Staff 2019). However, there are opposite concerns opposing viewpoints about what might affect drug users in how SIS may affect drug users. For instance, with a safe and comfortable place to inject, addicts could have become more complacent. SIS might encourage them in the activity instead of serving a deterrent. However, there are many studies have already shown the positive results resorts. The studie about SIS in Vancouver “Insite” SIS study has found that 23% of respondents had stopped injecting by the end of the study period, and another 57% had entered addiction treatment (Rourke and Bacon 2014). Also, in the Sydney Medically Supervised injecting Centre in Australia, 16% of addicts who received referrals for addiction treatment services confirmed actually participation in addiction treatment programs (Rourke and Bacon 2014). In accordance with these evidences this evidence, the outcome of the harm reduction policy is a tremendous success.

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