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IELTS Writing Task 2#4 About Art Lessons Some people think that the government should fund music, dance and art lessons for children. Others think that they should be funded by private businesses or by children's families. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Some individuals claim that a government should support children as financial to learn art, dance or music, while others believe that a budget of art, music and dance lessons should be allocated by private agendas and children’s families. Both views will be elucidated in the following paragraphs and my opinion will also be mentioned. On the one hand, states need to the creative children in order to constitute the developed countries. Therefore, children can be lead to a branch of arts such as music, dance or painting. However, many schools don’t have the art classes, so some people think that governments attempt about this issue and bear the cost to build the art classes. Thus, children of indigent families or children who grow up in the orphanage, too, benefit from these classes. On the other hand, some people argue that governments should lend a helping hand to other problems. For instance, many individuals live in poverty or the environment have been be polluted day by day. These problems are more significant than children’s art lessons. Firstly, governments ought to ensure a great life for the new generation, because of creating innovative and harmonized generations. For this reason, if a child wants to learn any field of art, the family of the child or private business can aid materially. In conclusion, all kinds of arts contribute to child development. As far as I am concerned that it needs for children, but governments cannot fund every time about these children's wishes, because they have to solve the biggest problems such as poverty, environmental pollution or transportation infrastructure. Therefore, provided that children families and private businesses support their children financially, it would be better.

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IELTS Writing Task 2#4 About Art Lessons

Some people think that the government should fund music, dance and art lessons for children. Others think that they should be funded by private businesses or by children's families. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some individuals claim that the government should support children financially to learn art, dance or music, while others believe that a budget of art, music and dance lessons should be allocated by private agendas and children’s families. Both views will be elucidated in the following paragraphs and my opinion will also be mentioned.
On the one hand, states need creative children in order to constitute the developed countries. Therefore, children can be led to a branch of arts such as music, dance or painting. However, many schools don’t have art classes, so some people think that the governments should address this issue and bear the cost to build the art classes. Thus, children of indigent families or children who grow up in orphanages, too, benefit from these classes.
On the other hand, some people argue that governments should lend a helping hand to other problems. For instance, the issue that many individuals live in poverty or that the environment has been be polluted day by day. These problems are more significant than children’s art lessons. Firstly, governments ought to ensure a great life for the new generation, for the sake of creating innovative and harmonized generations. For this reason, if a child wants to learn any field of art, the family of the child or private business can aid materially.
In conclusion, all kinds of arts contribute to child development. As far as I am concerned, it's important for children, but governments cannot fund every time these children's wishes, because they have to solve the biggest problems regarding poverty, environmental pollution or transportation infrastructure. Therefore, if children families and private businesses were able to support their children financially, it would be better.

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