That is the parctice of IELTS exam part 1. Can you help me modify it? Thank you!
The diagrams show the steps of the cocoa beans processed to making chocolate and exported to other counties.
At the first step, the farmers get the ripe pod from the fermentation stage. Then open the pod and take out the beans, post it on the banana leaves and let then to have 6 days in sun. After this process, the beans will change its color from purple to brown. Then rised the beans on the mats for drying for 10 to 20 days. After drying, the beans will be sacks and sent to the local agent for weighing and checking for quality. Finally the beans will be export after the money paid to farmers.
Overall, the process of exporting the beans are spend long time while the production requires only some simple equipment such as banana leaves and mats.
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That is the parctice of IELTS exam part 1. Can you help me modify it? Thank you!
The diagrams shows the steps of the cocoa beans processed to making chocolate and exported to other countries.
At the first step, the farmers get the ripe pod from the fermentation stage. Then open the pod and take out the beans, post it on the banana leaves and let then to have 6 days in sun. (I would prefer this sentence in passive form) --> Then, the pod is opened and the beans are taken out. The beans are spread in banana leaves to be dried for six days under the sunlight. After this process, the beans will change its color from purple to brown. Then rised the beans are placed on the a raised mats for further drying for 10 to 20 days. After drying, the beans will be put/packed in sacks and sent to the local agent for weighing and checking for quality. Finally the beans will be exported after the money is paid to farmers.
Overall, the process of exporting the cocoa beans are spends long time while the production requires only some simple equipment such as banana leaves and mats.
My comments:
- Please try to avoid grammar mistakes and typo.
- Use more vocabulary. You can read more books/articles to gain your vocabs.
- Check the word limit.
- Keep practicing!
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