Covid-19
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Next economy after COVID-19 is in everybody's interests.(Many people have mentioned about next economy after COVID-19.)
- Contemporary capitalism could be understood by creating stuffs to become trash.
- Necessity for fundamental Introspection of life attitude for pursuing endless desires (We must think back about your attitude for the life which for pursuing your desire incessantly.)
- Instead of economy of limitless competition, switching to economy which can be in harmony amongs human, society and nature.
There is a bitter-fun saying that 2020, the best year on Earth in the last century except for Homo sapiens. I wish we have many great companies more which it works for cleaning the Earth like 4Ocean...🙄
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Covid-19
Please correct my English article 🙇🏻♀️
Thinking about the next economy after COVID-19 is in everybody's interests.(Many people have talked about the next economy after COVID-19.)
- Contemporary capitalism could be understood as the creation of objects that soon become trash.
- There is a necessity for fundamental introspection about a life in pursuit of endless desires (We must think about our attitudes about a life in which we pursue our desires incessantly.)
- Instead of an economy of limitless competition, switching to an economic system in which there can be harmony between humans, society and nature is ideal.
There is a bitter-fun saying that 2020 will be the best year on Earth in the last century for all species except for Homo sapiens. I wish we had many more great companies which work towards cleaning the Earth like 4Ocean...🙄
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Covid-19
Please correct my English article 🙇🏻♀️
Thinking about the future economy after COVID-19 is in everybody's interests. (Many people have talked about the future of the economy after COVID-19).
- Contemporary capitalism can be understood as creating stuff which soon becomes trash.
- There is a fundamental need to introspect on having a life in pursuit of endless desires. (We must think about about our attitudes in a life where we pursue our desires incessantly).
- Instead of an economy of limitless competition, we should switch to an economy where humans, society, and nature can coexist in harmony.
There is a bittersweet saying that 2020 will be the best year on Earth in the last century for all species except for Homo sapiens. I wish that we had more great companies which work towards cleaning the Earth like 4Ocean. 🙄
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Interesting article content! Just a few points:
- "a fundamental need" sounds more natural than "there is a fundamental necessity" in the context of the sentence.
- when you use brackets, place the period outside the bracket i.e. (We must think about about our attitudes in a life where we pursue our desires incessantly).
- when using latin names like Homo sapiens, they should be italicized. This is more of a nitpicked point, but it's definitely important to remember when writing in formal register or in a medium like an article.
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- If you are talking about the economy that will come after the COVID-19 crisis, you could simply say "the future economy."
- The word "stuff" is not incorrect, but it is a more informal word. You could say "Contemporary capitalism could be understood as the creation of stuff that soon becomes trash", but what I wrote in the correction has a more formal tone.
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