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Discussion about the advertising Discussion:The advertising industry is to blame for all the money we waste on cleaning products that we don't need. Advertising is also done by businessman. It is a merchant who use the medium of advertising to spend all the money on cleaning products that we don't need. But I have to agree with this statement. Because of the falsity and glamour of advertisements that we are crazy and can't control the desire to buy many comment is that we don't need. With the development of technology, the more “terrible” things have come. People could buy the things online and only need to click the mouse gently and then the products will fly to your door. Businessmen take advantage of the convenience of the internet and through big data computing to understand users' needs and the potential purchasing power and then put the corresponding adverting to the customers' mailbox. Advertisements stimulate people's desire and you can see them everywhere. When you receive your product, you may find you don't really need them. advertisements. We should make a reasonable budget and think before your act. We should not be deceived by This rule is not only should buy in the cleaning product. When you want to buy something, you could find the users' experience and combine it to your situation, you may become more rational.

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Discussion about the advertising

Discussion:The advertising industry is to blame for all the money we waste on cleaning products that we don't need.
Advertising is also done by businessman businesses. It is a merchant who use the medium of advertising to
spend all the money on cleaning products that we don't need.
But I have to agree with this statement. It is because of the falsity and glamour of advertisements that we are crazy and can't control the desire to buy what many comment is that we don't need.
With the development of technology, the more “terrible” things have become.
People could buy the things online and only need to click the mouse gently and then the
products will fly to your door.
Businessmen take advantage of the convenience of the internet and through big data computing
to understand users' needs and the potential purchasing power and then put the corresponding
adverting to the customers' mailbox.
Advertisements stimulate people's desire and you can see them everywhere.
When you receive your product, you may find you don't really need it them.
advertisements.
We should make a reasonable budget and think before we your act. We should not be deceived by
This rule is not only should buy in the cleaning product.
When you want to buy something, you could find the users' experience and combine it to your
situation, you may become more rational.

The words and phrases I have changed in yellow didn't originally make sense. There's a few other areas that could flow better but that will come with practise.
Cheers,
Alice

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