About myself

From the very start I should say that it's not a simple matter to speak about myself, as it's hard to have a look at yourself from aside, but at the same time who knows you better than you yourself do?

Let me introduce myself. My name is Aliona, I am a girl of sixteen. If you ask my friends to describe me in a few words they will say that I am friendly and cheerful, that I am a person to rely on, but sometimes can be stubborn or quick-tempered. Frankly speaking, it's absolutely true. Because occasionally there are moments when I have to close my eyes and to count till one hundred to calm down. Also, I like staying alone, but at the same time I like to spend my leisure time with friends. Actually, everything depends on my mood.

I was born on the 10th of February in 1995 in a small mine settlement "Sarany" into a family of a mountain rescuer and a doctor. (Also, I have an elder sister, who is a student.) My previous school was a small one, there were only about one hundred and fifty pupils. Unfortunately, the point is that teaching in almost all settlement schools leaves much to be desired because of low demands and small budgets. In fact, there was only German, which was taught extremely badly. But thanks to my parents, since the sixth form I was driven to a nearby town for the English lessons once a week with a tutor. So, my entering the lyceum is supposed to be a good opportunity, and I face a new life without a feeling of sadness.

It's not a simple matter for me to choose a career and I still have no definite idea about it. But I have two requirements for my future profession: I want it to be connected with foreign languages somehow and to give me an opportunity to travel a lot.

I’d also like to say a few words about my inclinations. I haven't got any special hobby, but there are a lot of things in my life which I really enjoy, including my wonderful friends, incendiary dancing, engrossing reading, healthy eating, dark chocolate, funny pets, good movies, relaxing music, exciting adventures, jolly folly, active pastime, and unforgettable emotions...

And finally, the things I hope to achieve in my life: to have a very successful career, to travel around the world, to entirely fulfill my potential, to make a great amount of different recklessness, to build the house of my dreams, and to find someone in my life and share all that with him. I’ll do my best to make this a reality the sooner the better, because where there is a will, there is a way!

Because occasionally there are moments when I have to close my eyes and count till one hundred to calm down.

Don’t use the colon (:) to make a list after a verb.
A good essay! There were very few mistakes. It is okay in English to start a sentence with "But, And, or Because" occasionally, only don’t make a habit of it. :)