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I thought the symbol of Okinawa is simply tropical scenery, beach and blue sea, just like Hawaii islands. But after I saw these videos, I found that the most special thing about Okinawa is the fusion of traditional Japanese culture and tropical island style. In the video, there was not only island scenery, but also the Japanese festival, the fireworks in summer and so on.
Because the special location, climate and life style, the native people in Okinawa seems to be open, optimistic and enthusiastic. People in the videos smiles brightly and they get together to celebrate their festivals. Both men , women and children seem to like to participate in activities, and the relationship between people is also very close.
And I think they may have a deep sense of identity with their culture. As a special part of Japanese culture, they protect their unique culture very well. The people in Okinawa are proud of their culture, and Hometown consciousness is very strong.
Okinawa people have some Japanese characteristics, but there are also some differences. Like normal Japanese, they attach great importance to traditional festivals and the bond between people. They are polite and conservative. At the same time, they are more enthusiastic and open.
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I thought the symbol of Okinawa is simply tropical scenery, beach and blue sea, just like Hawaii islands the Hawaiian Islands. But** after I saw these videos, I found that the most special thing about Okinawa is the fusion of traditional Japanese culture and tropical island style. In the video, there was not only island scenery, but also the Japanese festival, the fireworks in summer and so on.***
Because of the special location, climate and life style***, the native people in of Okinawa seems to be open, optimistic and enthusiastic***. The people People in the videos smiles**** brightly and they get together to celebrate their festivals. Both Men, women and children all seem to like to participate in activities, and the relationships between people is are also very close.*****
And****** I think they may have a deep sense of identity with their culture. As a special part of Japanese culture, they protect their unique culture very well.******* The people in Okinawa are proud of their culture, and hometown consciousness is very strong.
Okinawa people have some Japanese characteristics, but there are also some differences. Like normal Japanese citizens, they attach great importance to traditional festivals and the bonds between people. They are polite and conservative. At the same time, they are more enthusiastic and open.
* Titles should be Capitalized. Also I believe you are talking about your personal comments/thoughts on the videos you have watched. Using "comments of videos" suggests that it is the comments found in the comments section of the videos. You might also want to add more context to the title such as "My Comments on the Videos I Have Watched" or replace comments with "My Thoughts on the Videos I Have Watched"
** In grade school I was taught to avoid beginning sentences with "But" (however that might not be true). Regardless you can change the "But" to "However," if you would like.
*** (Personal preference) You can add the oxford comma (..the Japanese festival, the fireworks in summer, and so on.)
**** Since the subject is a plural (The people), you need to conjugate the verb (smiles -> smiles)
***** Since you have three subjects (Men, women, and children), using "Both" (a counter for two objects) should not be used. I added "all" to emphasis the importance of the entire group being involved (as you were trying to do with "Both")
****** Same thing as beginning a sentence with "But". You can use "Furthermore," if you would like but the word choice is up to you.
******* The prepositional phrase "As a special part of Japanese culture," is followed by the subject that it is modifying. I believe that you are trying to say that the people of Okinawa are what is special about Japanese culture, but then continue to say that they are protecting the unique culture that you previous described them as. While this is not incorrect, it made me reread that sentence and you can choose to reword this if you would like. (As a special part of Japanese culture, the people of Okinawa put great effort in protecting this way of living.) <- is an example but I do not wish to change the spirit of your writing.
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