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Please practice more real friendship Hi, I'm afraid of looking how things are changing. I always played with friends around my house, I ran, jumped, played football, ride, etc... Now children are playing videogames, chatting and are fatter. Adults are changing their social habits, like filtring with others they use alot of apps instead of knowing someone on the street, bar, library.... That makes us less comunicative, shy and more superficial because before women let you talk but now only they have to see who is pretty. Please don't use those apps and talk face to face with people.

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Please practice more real friendship

Hi,

I'm afraid of looking at how things are changing. (another option: I'm afraid when I see how things are changing.)
I always played with friends around my house. I ran, jumped, played football, ride rode ______ (bicycles? skateboards? horses?), etc...
Now children are playing video games, chatting and are fatter.
Adults are changing their social habits, like filtring flirting with others; they use alot a lot of apps instead of knowing someone on the street, bar, library....
That makes us less communicative, shy and more superficial because before women let you talk but now only they only have to see who is pretty. ("pretty" is fine to describe women. "Attractive" or "good looking" can describe both men and women. "Handsome" is good if describing only men).
Please don't use those apps and instead talk face to face with people. (I added "instead" for clarity, so that the "please don't" couldn't make the second half of the sentence mean "please don't talk face to face with people")

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