What is the favorite day of the year? Use reasons to support your response.
As you know, everybody has specific day in their lifetime, me included. I guess, the best day of the year for me is more different than other people. Actually I was born in a big family. I have three brothers and three sisters and I am the youngest in the family. All my brothers and sisters got married and they have children. I have three nephews and five nieces.
Typically, we should take eight birthdays every year. But we take just one birthday for all children. All members of family come to my parent’s house and we take a big party. This day is usually in the middle of summer when the schools are closed. This day is the best day for me and it is extreme enjoyable.
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What is the your(?) favorite day of the year? Use reasons to support your response.
As you know, everybody has a specific day in their lifetime (this seems to refer to just one day in your entire life), me included. I guess, the best day of the year for me is more different than other people different than other people's ('more/less' is rarely used with 'different', and is incorrect in this case). Actually I was born in a big family. I have three brothers and three sisters and I am the youngest in the family. All my brothers and sisters got married and they have children. I have three nephews and five nieces.
Typically, we should take have eight birthdays every year. But we take have just one birthday for all the children. All members of the/our family come to my parent’s house and we take have a big party. This day is usually in the middle of summer when the schools are closed. This day is the best day for me and it is extremely enjoyable.
I think when you say 'specific' you mean 'special'. However, I'm not certain.
'Lifetime' refers to the entirety of your life; a once-in-a-lifetime event is something you only experience once (for example, whenever you do something for the first time, the novelty of it is a once-in-a-lifetime experience).
'More/less different' is only used when you're comparing two (or more) things that are different to another thing. For example, if we were comparing animals, you might say that a bear is different than a dog because it is bigger and scarier, but a fish is more different because it doesn't even have any legs. I.e. the difference between a dog and a fish is greater than the difference between a dog and a bear.
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What is the your favorite day of the year? Use reasons to support your response.
Typically, we should take have eight birthday parties every year, but we take have just one birthday party for all children. All members of the family come to my parent’s house and we take have a big party. This day is usually in the middle of summer when the schools are closed. This day is the best day for me and it is extremely enjoyable.
I crossed out "in your lifetime" because that phrase describes something that happened one time. Example: the day you got married, the day your first child was born, the day you got your medical degree, etc.
I crossed out "As you know" because if it's known, there is no need to state it.
I crossed out "I guess" because you are not guessing --you are firmly stating your preference.
I crossed out "Actually" because it's not needed and doesn't quite fit the situation. "Actually " is an adverb that is typically used to emphasize something. Example: "He actually thought I would leave my husband for him, but I would never do that." OR "He seems to be busy, but he is actually doing very little."
I crossed out "in the family" because you've already told us you're describing your family, so you don't need to restate it.
I crossed out "than" because "than" is typically used to compare two things. Example: "Tom is taller than Mary. He is smarter than I am." "From" is the correct word. However, in everyday conversation you will often hear people use "than" incorrectly.
In the second paragraph I inserted "parties" because the children always have eight birthdays, but the family doesn't celebrate them separately. You have one big party.
I think this piece is pretty good. You used a few words incorrectly, but you know how to properly construct a sentence, which is difficult for many people. Even though I crossed out several words, most of them were grammatically correct, just not essential. Overall, good job!
If you have any questions about my corrections, please ask.
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What is the favorite day of the year? Use reasons to support your response.
As you know, everybody has specific days in their lifetime, me included. I guess, the best day of the year for me is different than other people. I was born in a big family and I have three brothers and three sisters. I am the youngest in the family. All my brothers and sisters got married and they have children. I have three nephews and five nieces.
Typically, we should have eight birthdays every year, but we have just one birthday for all the children. All members of the family come to my parent’s house and we have a big party. This day is usually in the middle of summer when the schools are closed. This day is the best day for me, and it is extremely enjoyable.
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