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20200401essay Nowadays, many people believe that it’s better to have broad knowledge because it means they’re wise and knowledgeable. However, I think specializing in one specific subject is more important. It not only symbols your core competition force, but also making you more chances to improve your specific skills. Specifying in one specific subject make us possible to compete easily with other people. If someone just knows many things but not study them deeply, he or she can only take jobs which don’t need so much specific skills, which means everyone can replace him or her. In another word, he or she doesn’t have core competitive force. This kind of person cannot make much progress in his or her work. Specifying in one specific subject enables us to make progress in our specific field. Specifying in one subject means you pay much time and energy in your study at this subject, so you will read more essays and have more chance to learn. If you just read or study a little in many fields without patience, it will be hard for you to make progress in your studies. Take myself for an example. I chose many classes last year, such as English, history and math. However, I rarely reviewed them after the final test and I just know little about each subject. As a result, it didn’t make much progress on my majoring subject and I lost much time. All in all, specializing in one specific subject is more likely to produce better learning outcomes

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20200401essay

Nowadays, many people believe that it’s better to have broad knowledge because it means they’re wise and knowledgeable in many different areas. However, I think specializing in one specific subject is more important (or...is more beneficial). It not only symbols your core competition force gives you a competitive advantage, but also making gives you more chances to improve your specific skills.

Specifying Specialising in one specific subject makes us it possible for us to compete easily with other people. If someone just knows a little of many things but does not study them deeply in detail, he or she can only take jobs which don’t need so much specific specialized skills, which . This means everyone anyone can easily replace him or her. In an other words, he or she doesn’t have core competitive force a competitive edge (or ... competitive advantage) . This kind of person cannot make much progress in his or her work.

Specifying Specializing in one's specific subject enables us one (earlier you used one) to make progress in our one's specific field. Specifying Specializing in one subject means you pay spend much more time and energy in your study at for this subject, so you will read more essays and books and have more chances to learn.

If you just read or study a little in many fields without patience, it will be hard for you to make progress in your studies. Take myself for an example. I chose many classes last year, such as English, history and math. However, I rarely reviewed them after the final test and I just know little about each subject. As a result, it didn’t make much progress on my majoring subject and I lost much time.

All in all, specializing in one specific subject is more likely to produce better learning outcomes.

Well done. A few things to take note :

-Specifying <> Specializing. They have very different meanings and they are not interchangeable.

-You used "core competitive force" a few times but it is incorrect. I think you wanted to say "competitive advantage" or "competitive edge."

-"In another word" is incorrect here. Usually we say "in other words."

-Sometimes you say "you," while other paragraphs you say "us." I did not correct this, but maybe next time you can take note of this and try to be more consistent throughout the whole essay.

-Don't forget to leave a line spacing between paragraphs. It makes it easier for us to read. :)

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