Governments should spend more money in support of the arts or athletics?
As we know, with the accelerating development of social productivity, arts and athletics have played more and more important roles in society. However, there are some dissensions in whether the arts ought to receive more funds than athletics like state-sponsored Olympic teams. From my point of view, I agree that the government is supposed to spend more money on the arts.
First of all, the growth of investment in the arts is beneficial to cultural education. Because arts can effectively elevate students' cultural awareness, such as their understanding of the historical context of customs and rituals, their appreciation of ethnic handicrafts and their interests in trans-cultural and trans-generational communication. "Art is the stored honey of the human soul", said Theodore Dreiser. By learning the arts, students can learn the greatness of humanity and get their mental world enriched.
In addition, the arts can boost the economy by generating loads of employment. Take the Federal Art Project in the 1930s for example. At that time, the US was in the Depression. However, thanks to this project launched by the US government, hundreds of thousands of artists found their jobs and a lot of community art centers were established, which mitigate the employment problem and promote social progress. Therefore, to some extent, the arts can open up opportunities for certain careers and revitalize the economy.
Last but not least, that's not to say the athletics are not essential. Actually, the athletics are of significance indeed. Nevertheless, they are not so appropriate for students' spiritual world education and may hurt students' bodies. As sports are usually physical exercise and it's known that some competitive activities like soccer or basketball are easy to get injured, which are not proper for weak boys or girls.
In conclusion, although athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams matter, arts are supposed to be dedicated more money to by governments. Not just because they conduce to cultural education, but also because they behoove the economy via increasing jobs.
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Should governments spend more money in support of the arts or athletics? (Some questions require inversion in English.)
As we know, with the accelerating development of social productivity, arts and athletics have played more and more important roles in society. However, there are some dissensions is some dissent (dissensions is not used like that) in whether the arts ought to receive more funds than athletics like state-sponsored Olympic teams. From my point of view, I agree believe that the government is supposed to spend more money on the arts. (Agree with whom?)
Firstly (less colloquial), the growth of (does not collocate) investment in the arts is beneficial to cultural education. Because arts can effectively elevate students' cultural awareness, such as their understanding of the historical context of customs and rituals traditions (rituals is mostly used in religious contexts), their appreciation of ethnic handicrafts and their interests in trans-cultural and trans-generational communication. "Art is the stored honey of the human soul", said Theodore Dreiser. By learning the arts, students can learn of the greatness of humanity and get their mentality world will be enriched. ('Get enriched', does not collocate in English, and 'mental world' sounds a bit off, mentality is a better word here.)
In addition, the arts can boost the economy by generating loads of employment. Take the Federal Art Project in the 1930s for example. At that time, the US was in the Great Depression. However, thanks to this project launched by the US government, hundreds of thousands of artists found their jobs and a lot of community art centers were established. This mitigated the employment problem and promote social progress. (Sentence was too long, run-on sentence.) Therefore, to some extent, (weakens your argument) the arts can open up opportunities for certain careers and revitalize the economy.
In conclusion, although athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams matter, arts are supposed to should (incorrect collocation) be dedicated more money to by governments. Not just because they are conducive (conduce is very archaic, 'to be conducive' in the adjective form is more natural) to cultural education, but also because they behoove benefit (behoove is too informal and archaic) the economy via increasing jobs.
I hope these corrections help! You wrote a good paper overall with solid supporting points and mostly accurate grammar. It just took a bit of clean up and some small grammatical corrections but I hope this helped. :)
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