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Essay2 Topic Agree or disagree:The number of young people who live with their parents after they finish their education will increase in the future. Living by themselves allows people to stay independent and feel free. However, I make argument that the number of young people who live with their parents after they finish their education will increase in the future.There are two reasons that support my opinion. First, the Japanese economy seems to be stagnant and under recession. Because of this , young people would feel discouraged from living alone. Paying for house rent,food, utility bills such as water, gas, and electricity is heavy burden for them. Therefore a lot of young people are likely to choose living with their parents after their graduation. Second, a lot of young people live with their parents to protect their secure life. Nowadays, a range of risks like criminals and disasters are there on our daily life. To keep their life safety, it is good choice for young people to choose living with their parents. In conclusion, more and more young people will choose to live with their parents, due to cost and safety.

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Agree or disagree:The number of young people who live with their parents after they finish their education will increase in the future.

Living by themselves allows people to stay be independent and feel free. However, I believe make argument that the number of young people who live with their parents after they finish their education will increase in the future.There are two reasons that support my opinion.
First, the Japanese economy seems to be stagnant and under in a recession. Because of this, young people will feel discouraged from living alone. Paying for a houses rent, food, utility bills such as water, gas, and electricity is a heavy burden for them. Therefore a lot of young people are likely to choose living with their parents after their graduation.
Second, a lot of young people live with their parents for security to protect their secure life. Nowadays, there are a range of risks like criminals and disasters are there on present in our daily life. To keep their lives secure life safety, it is a good choice for young people to choose living with their parents.
In conclusion, more and more young people will choose to live with their parents, due to cost and safety.

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