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Why do you think people attend college or university? Saying that people attend college or university is a truth. Indeed, In the recent years, the number of students in higher education has increased to a certain point that it is now considered normal for a teenager to be a student. It wasn’t always the case and the truth is that, before the second world war, most of people wouldn’t attend college or university. Indeed, it’s very likely to meet an old couple of grandparents that didn’t go to class. At their time, one would go to class until the age of 14 and then work. The higher education’s students were rare and often had an upper-class background. Therefore, this assertion leads us to a significative question: why people would attend college or university. In light of nowadays, the main answer would be that students are now required to attend at least college and university. In many states such as France or the United-States, studying is now compulsory until the age of 16. Apart from that, there’s also an undeniable spurt in the number of university’s students. Ranging from hard sciences to plastic art, universities now provides a wide offer of classes and welcome each year an increasing number of students. First, it seems that going to college and university is now institutionalized as a classic life path. Indeed, the first way to get a job is now to have degree. Whereas before one could leverage his former experiences and skills to seduce an employer, there is now a protocol that must be enforced and it is especially true in the so-called “highly-skilled” jobs. Law firms would require a lawyer a law degree, preferably from a well-know university, and then will ask him to attend an interview. Meanwhile, the baker might as well demand a bakery certificate but he will be more likely to hire someone that proven as trustworthy and skilled, even though he learnt bakery following in dad’s footstep. But the job reason cannot be the only one why people would attend college or university. There must be an higher one, a one that deals with the appetite of human being of learning. Indeed, if jobs were the only reason why one would go to class, there would be more dropouts than ever. The fact is that even the most annoying and the least earnest students receive something from education. They’re learning and it gives them a foretaste of how the world used to be, how it is now, and how it will be. Hi! Can someone help me to correct my English dissertation please, Thanks!!

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Why do you think people attend college or university?

Saying It's a fact that people attend college or university is a truth [1]. Indeed, In the recent years, the number of students in higher education has increased to a certain point that it is now considered normal for a teenager to be a student. It This wasn’t always the case, and the truth is that before the second world war, most of people wouldn’t didn't [2] attend college or university. Indeed, [3] it’s very likely to meet an older couple of grandparents that didn’t go to class [4]. At their time, one many people would go to class attend school until the age of 14 and then work. The Higher education’s students were rare and often had an upper-class background. Therefore, This assertion leads us to a significative significant question: why people would attend college or university.
In light of nowadays, These days, [5] the main answer would be factor is that students are now required to at least attend at least college and university. In many states countries such as France or the United-States, studying is now compulsory until the age of 16. Apart from that, there’s also an undeniable spurt growth in the number of university’s students. Ranging from hard sciences to plastic art, universities now provides provide a wide offer range of classes and welcome each year an increasing number of students each year. First, it seems that going to college and university is now institutionalized as a classic life path. Indeed, the first best way to get a job is now is to have degree. Whereas before one could leverage his one's former experiences and skills to seduce impress [6] an employer, there is now a protocol that must be enforced and it is especially true in the so-called “highly-skilled” jobs. Law firms would require a lawyer to have a law degree, preferably from a well-know university, and then will ask him a candidate to attend an interview. Meanwhile, the a baker might as well demand a bakery certificate but he will be more likely to hire someone that proven as themselves trustworthy and skilled, even though he learnt bakery following in dad’s footstep. [7]
But the a job reason cannot be the only one why reason people would attend college or university. There must be an a higher one, a one that deals with the appetite of human being of for learning. Indeed, if jobs were the only reason why one would to go to class, there would be more dropouts than ever. The fact is that even the most annoying and the least earnest students receive something from education. They’re learning and it gives them a foretaste of how the world used to be, how it is now, and how it will be.

Hi! Can someone help me to correct my English dissertation please, Thanks!!

[1] You could also rephrase to something more like: In recent years, saying that people attend college is a simple truth. You'd need to reword the second sentence if you use the same phrase, though.

[2] you could say "wouldn't have attended" or "didn't attend" but not "wouldn't attend."

[3] stylistic suggestion to not use "Indeed" again so close to another instance.

[4] it's awkward to talk about meeting grandparents... you could say "the grandparents of many current students" or something like that. Also, you want to be more specific than "class" or leave it out.

[5] you can say "nowadays," OR "in light of [something]" but not both. Nowadays is very colloquial and pretty old-fashioned, so I'd suggest "These days" as a compromise.

[6] "seduce" has a sexual connotation and can have an implication of manipulation or deceit, so be careful with it.

[7] this is a difficult / awkward construction. if you really want to add this, you could rephrase to something using apprentice or through a family business or something.
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Why do you think people attend college or university?

Saying It goes without saying. that people attend college or university is a truth Indeed, In the recent years, the number of students in higher education has have increased to a certain point that it is now considered normal for a teenager to be a student. It wasn’t always the case and the truth is, (Comma here) that before the second world war, most of people wouldn’t attend college or university. Indeed, it’s you are very likely to meet an older couple of or grandparents that didn’t go to class. At During their time, one would go to class until the age of 14 and then work. The higher education’s students Students in higher education were rare and often had an upper-class background. Therefore, this assertion leads us to a significative question: why people would attend college or university.
In the light of Nowadays, the main answer would be that students are now required to attend at least college and university. In many states such as France or the United-States, studying is now compulsory until the age of 16. Apart from that, there’s also an undeniable spurt increase in the number of university’s students. Ranging from hard sciences to plastic art, universities now provides a wide offer range/variety of classes and welcome each year an increasing number of students. First, it seems that going to college and university is now institutionalized as a classic life path. Indeed, the first primary way to get a job is now to to have a degree now. Whereas before one could leverage his their former experiences and skills to seduce an employer, there is now a protocol that must be enforced and it is especially true in the so-called “highly-skilled” jobs. Law firms would require a lawyer to have a law degree, preferably from a well-know university, and then will ask him to attend an interview. Meanwhile, the baker might as well demand a bakery certificate but he will be more likely to hire someone that has been proven as to be trustworthy and skilled, even though he learnt learned bakery following in dad’s footstep.
But the a job reason cannot be the only one reason why people would attend college or university. There must be an a higher one, a one that deals with the appetite of human being of the human being's appetite for learning. Indeed, if jobs were the only reason why one would go to class, there would be more dropouts than ever. The fact is that even the most annoying and the least earnest students receive something from education. They’re learning and it gives them a foretaste of how the world used to be, how it is now, and how it will be.

Hi! Can someone help me to correct my English dissertation please, Thanks!!

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