My IELTS Writing Task2: Looking for feedback and correction Hello italki users, especially the native English speakers, I am preparing for IELTS exam in next weekend and I want to improve my writing part. Your feedback and correction are greatly welcome and it would help me improving the writing skills. Thank you :) Question: One of the consequence of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectation is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? In decades ago, the average life time of human was about 60 to 70 years old since a medical care at that time was not effective and affordable for everyone, however, there is a lot improvement in medical care nowadays. Since there is an advance technology implemented in human medical care, living longer can be expected for all people. Some people argues that this development will help rescuing people from their sickness, others might have concerns on its drawbacks. In my opinion, the better medical care which enhancing longer life time for people has more advantages outweigh its drawbacks. When people getting older, they want to stay healthy and live longer to enjoy their retired life. Many people work hard in order to live their happy life later, with the improved medical care, the elder people can ensure that they will able to stay healthy along their rest of retirement life. For example, the young parents can simply enjoy their working life since they know that their grandparents will enjoy taking care of their children. On the other hand, even though the elder people live longer with assistance needed, they are still able to live their life as normal as strong people. Due to there is an assisting robot which will facilitate this group of people to spend their daily life happily. However, a drawback of this medical robot care is that its price is expensive. In summary, the advantages of improved medical care outweigh its drawbacks. Even though the cost of using the advance medical equipment is still high in present day, I believe, the price is affordable for everyone. (273 words)