Dong Hyuk's Diary - 023

I couldn't wake up early today because there was a company dinner yesterday.

Of course, I didn't drink any whiskey, Because it is my goal of this year.

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First, I got rid of the first period and conjoined the first and second sentence, they don't make sense alone. Because the sentences were joined, naturally some of the letters turned lowercase. I added in an "a", just to make sense of things. Then I removed "because" and replaced it with a coma, i'll explain why or an alterative to your sentence. Lastly, I removed "of", it will help your sentence flow more clearly.

For every sentence you make, when using because, try to have a cause and effect.

For example:

"I fell off of a chair because I lost balance."

The cause is that I lost balance.

The effect is that I fell off of a chair.

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OR, you could change the last sentence entirely to:

Because it is my goal this year, I didn't drink whiskey.

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Try to stay away from starting a sentence with the word "Because", there is a way to do it that is correct and incorrect. You can start a sentence with "because" if it is complete. For example:

"Because the girls were tired, they went to sleep."

It includes a cause and effect, it has two parts.

They were tired, they went to sleep.

"Because the girls were tired."

This leaves the reader confused, it's missing the other half.

If you walked up to someone and said "because it is my goal this year", they would be very confused. A complete sentence would be "Because it is my goal this year, I didn't drink whiskey."

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Your entry tells a story and it is comprehensible. I commend you on your goal, it's excellent! Keep up the good work! I hope my notes give you an idea on how we can utilize the word "because", and guide you into a new direction. I tried my best to color code things to make them more understanding. I look forward to your improvement, if you have any questions feel free to ask.

Dong Hyuk's Diary - 023

I couldn't wake up early today because I attended a company dinner yesterday.

Of course, I didn't drink any whiskey as it is my goal for this year.