It snowed
We’re having mild winter this year in Charlotte. But it surprisingly snowed last Sunday. It wasn’t that big snow that piles up but my kids were so excited. Since I grew up the area where we don’t have much snow, I can’t help being excited when it snows. I still vividly remember that day the we couldn’t go school due to heavy snow when I was elementary school. My siblings and me made a snowman and a snow igloo, and that was so much fun.
シャーロットでは今年の冬は暖冬ですが、先週の日曜日に珍しく雪が降りました。積もることはありませんでしたが、子供達は大喜びでした。私も子供の頃雪の少ない地域で育ったため、雪をみるとわくわくしてしまいます。子供の頃珍しく大雪が降って学校が休みになった日に、兄弟と一緒に雪だるまやかまくらを作ったことを今でも鮮明に思い出すことができます。
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It snowed
We are having a mild winter this year in Charlotte. But Surprisingly it snowed last Sunday. It wasn’t that big snow that piles up, but my kids were so excited. Since I have grown up the area where we live hasn’t had much snow. I can’t help being excited when it snows. I still vividly remember the day that we couldn’t go school due to heavy snow. when I was in elementary school. My siblings and I made a snowman and a snow igloo, and that was so much fun.
シャーロットでは今年の冬は暖冬ですが、先週の日曜日に珍しく雪が降りました。積もることはありませんでしたが、子供達は大喜びでした。私も子供の頃雪の少ない地域で育ったため、雪をみるとわくわくしてしまいます。子供の頃珍しく大雪が降って学校が休みになった日に、兄弟と一緒に雪だるまやかまくらを作ったことを今でも鮮明に思い出すことができます。
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It snowed
We’re having a mild winter this year in Charlotte. But surprisingly, it snowed last Sunday. It wasn’t that big a snowfall that piles up, but my kids were so excited. Since I grew up the in an area where we don’t have much snow, I can’t help being excited when it snows. I still vividly remember that day the we couldn’t go to school due to heavy snow when I was in elementary school. My siblings and me I made a snowman and a snow igloo, and that was so much fun.
シャーロットでは今年の冬は暖冬ですが、先週の日曜日に珍しく雪が降りました。積もることはありませんでしたが、子供達は大喜びでした。私も子供の頃雪の少ない地域で育ったため、雪をみるとわくわくしてしまいます。子供の頃珍しく大雪が降って学校が休みになった日に、兄弟と一緒に雪だるまやかまくらを作ったことを今でも鮮明に思い出すことができます。
Not bad, Taiji. Be careful with the articles, "the" and "a". Also note the subject pronoun "I", because you are doing the action.
Keep practicing! Simon.
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