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“世界上最重要的人"
我认为每个人都很重要。每个人都改变我们。最初, 最重要的人是父母。他们是最耐心和冷静的。第二重要的人是亲人，丈夫或妻子。他\她可能会懒，得意, 粗心，但是我们仍然会爱这个人。第三重要的人是我们的孩子。生活中有很多重要的人。所以，记得自己很重要。
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“世界上最重要的人"
我认为每个人都很重要。每个人都改变着我们（ I added 着 for making it sound more natural to my native ears. 着 emphasizes the fact that everyone is on-going changing us) 。最初, 最重要的人是父母。他们是最耐心的(Symmetrical balance to the next 的） 和冷静的。第二重要的人是亲人，丈夫或妻子。他\她可能会懒，得意（得意 is usually a positive word. 自满 is better) , 粗心，但是我们仍然会爱这个人。第三重要的人是我们的孩子。生活中有很多重要的人。所以 ( Logically, I think 此外 at here is better)，记得自己也( 也= also; I guess, you mean "It's important to love ourselves." ?) 很重要。
:) Brilliant! Your essay really touched my heart especially in my difficult days in China. I agree people should take good care of themselves and also treat the people who are loving them well. Now, I am very appreciated my parents, closed relatives and best friends are still alive until today.
Today (2020/2/9) is the Chinese Lantern Festival. People traditionally would eat sticky rice balls for celebrating the reunion. So, Wish you and your family members a happy lantern festival! :D
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Ziliya, thanks for your encouragement! Your essay is impressive to me, and also inspired me to think more of my living situation.
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Hi, Ziliya! "亲人", this phrase actually includes a wide range , it can be parents, children, spouse or just close relatives. According context, I believe "伴侣" will be better in here, "第二重要的人是伴侣，丈夫或妻子。".
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