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The Weird Dream I Had Have you ever had a weird dream that you can’t explain clearly or remember what exactly it was. I still remember one dream which I can’t forget. That was when I just became a junior high school student. I had a grandfather, who is a drunkard, and often has a quarrel with my grandmother. After every fight, my grandmother was always looking sad. I didn’t want to see such her face. I don’t like him so much because of a fight. But he is very kind to me and my brother. When I was a child, he bought me some games, took me around the city, and talked to us about funny things, with a childish smile. Once he gets drunken, he becomes hot-tempered so I wish he would’ve never been drunken. When I was going to graduate from the primary school, my grandfather became ill. He was diagnosed with lung cancer. He was a heavy-drunker, but also a heavy-smoker. His condition was getting worse. However, I had never been to the hospital where he was because I hated him so much at that time. One morning, I had a very weird dream. In the dream, I was in my grandfather’s house(he lived separately). I was seeing him off at the entrance ,waving my hands as he was smiling meaningfully. And then, the dream was ended. I jumped to wake up and realized I sweated so much. At that time, I thought it does mean nothing and he would be better, then drink a lot again. After a year of the day, he passed away. I couldn’t talk to him while he was in the hospital. I am now regretting that I have never been to see him while he was sick. I have a lot of memories about him. he was not very good grandfather, but I can’t forget his smile and laughter. I’ve been making stories to bring to heaven, to talk with him.

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The Weird Dream I Had / My Weird Dream

Have you ever had a weird/strange dream that you can’t explain clearly, or remember what exactly it was. I still remember one dream which I can’t forget. That was when I [just became]/had just become a junior high school student.

I had a grandfather, who [is]/was a drunkard, and often [has a] quarrelled with my grandmother. After every fight, my grandmother was always looking looked sad. I didn’t want to see such her face. I don’t didn't like him so much because of this a fight.

But he is was very kind to me and my brother. When I was a child, he bought me some games, took me around the city, and talked to us about funny things, with a childish smile. Once/When he gets got/was drunken, he becomes became hot-tempered, so I wish he would’ve had never been drunken.

When I was going/about to graduate from (the) primary school, my grandfather became ill. He was diagnosed with lung cancer. He was a heavy-drinker, but also a heavy smoker. His condition [was getting]/got/became worse. However, I had never been ❊ went to the hospital where he was being treated because I hated him so much at that time.
❊the past perfect tense is used when referring to an event or situation already in the past at the time of the account, which is itself in the past. In this case the two are concurrent [not going to the hospital, hating him so much], so the past perfect is not appropriate.

One morning, I had a very weird dream. In the dream, I was in my grandfather’s house (he lived separately). I was seeing him off at the entrance ,waving my hands as he was smiling meaningfully. And then, the dream was ended. I jumped to wake up and realized that I had sweated so much. At that time, I thought it does didn't mean nothing anything and he would be better, then drink a lot again. After a year [of the day]/A year later, he passed away. I couldn’t talk to him while he was in the hospital.


I am now regretting that I have had never been to see him while he was sick. I have a lot of memories about/of him. He was not a very good grandfather, but I can’t forget his smile and laughter. I’ve been making stories to bring to heaven, to talk with him.

Very well written !
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The Weird Dream I Had

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I am now regretting that I have never been went to see him while he was sick. I have a lot of memories about/of him. He was not a very good grandfather, but I can’t/won't forget his smile and laughter.

I’ve been making stories to bring/take to Heaven, to talk with him.
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You almost made me cry...
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i love the last paragraph so much. ur article started with old memories and conflicts and sadness, but it ended with love and peace and ur warm wishes.

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