Modern life
The adjective which best describes modern life is "hurried". Our existence is getting busier and busier and the occasions on which we can take time for ourselves, to chill out, to take up a hobby or simply to read a book are becoming rarer and rarer.
A less hurried life would allow us to look inward; How many of you have lately done something relaxing without thinking about their work or about a deadline they have to meet ?
We all should take one day off per week on which we can find ourselves again , just by lying on the grass and gazing at the starry sky, after leaving the daily stress behind.
Moreover, we are losing the connection with nature and consequently the connection with others. On the surface, we live in a world where, thanks to the Net, we are all connected. But seen from a more careful perspective, we are getting disconnected from what surrounds us, from ourselves. What will become of us once we will find ourselves among the cold walls of isolation?
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Modern life
The adjective which best describes modern life is "hurried". Our existence is getting busier and busier and the occasions on which we can take time for ourselves, to chill out, to take up a hobby or simply to read a book are becoming rarer and rarer.
A less hurried life would allow us to look inward: how many of you have done something lately relaxing without thinking about their your work or about a deadline they you have to meet?
We all should take one day off per week on which so we can find ourselves again , just by lying on the grass and gazing at the starry sky, after leaving the daily stress behind.
Moreover, we are losing the connection with nature and, consequently, the connection with others. On the surface, we live in a world where, thanks to the Net, we are all connected. But seen from a more careful perspective, we are getting disconnected from what surrounds us, from ourselves. What will become of us once we will find ourselves among the cold walls of isolation?
Cristina--Excellent clear writing--with good vocabulary. Review/Revise use of commas. I just read in the book called Sapiens that humans began to become anxious after the invention of agriculture about 9000 years ago. When we started farming, we had to worry about what would happen to crops next month, next season, next year. But when we were hunters and gatherers, we only worried about the next day or two.
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Ilene
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Modern life
The adjective which best describes modern life is "hurried". Our existence (Existence if very formal. You could also simply write "Our lives are") is getting busier and busier, and the occasions on which when we can take time for ourselves, to chill out, to take up a hobby or simply to read a book are becoming rarer and rarer (an alternate way to say this is "are more and more rare" which is more active and less passive in tone).
A less hurried life would allow us to look inward; . How many of you have lately done something lately to relax relaxing without thinking about their work or about a deadline they have to meet ("they have to meet" is already understood. It is not wrong but also not necessry)?
We all should take one day off per ("per" is formal. I would just use "a" or "each") week on which we can to find ourselves again , just by lying on the grass and gazing at the starry sky, after leaving the daily stresses behind (or you could write "after leaving the stress of the day behind).
Moreover, we are losing the connection with nature and consequently the connection with others. On the surface, we live in a world where, thanks to the Net, we are all connected. But seen from a more careful (careful is not wrong, but I might say "thoughtful" because there is no danger here--only deeper consideration) perspective, we are getting disconnected from what surrounds us, and from ourselves. What will become of us once we will find ourselves among the cold walls of isolation?
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