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IELTS Writing Task 1 #140 Hi guys, I'm trying to increase my writing skill for the IELTS exam. Could some one, correct this silly essay? Thanks. The title and the chart are below. Title: The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Essay: The graph shows the information about the percentage of people which use different social networking site in the 2014 and 2015 years. The graph is divided in six group with two different bar chart each one. Each bar have a different length in according to their percentage and they are coloured green and blue to represent the different years. As can be seen, both in the 2014 and 2015 the most people use one social network. The percentage are 36 in the 2014 and 28 in the 2015. Just under there are people which use two sites. The percentage in the years are more or less the same, 23 and 24%. The people which use five site are really low. They are 2% in the 2014 than they barely grow in the 2015 to 4%. Surprisingly the number of people which not use social network are really high. They are 22% in the 2014 and then they decrease up to 21% in the 2015. Their percentage are very similar to the percentage of the people which use two social network site.

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IELTS Writing Task 1 #140

Hi guys, I'm trying to increase my writing skill for the IELTS exam. Could some one, correct this silly essay? Thanks. The title and the chart are below.

Title:
The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Essay:
The graph shows the information about the percentage of people which who used different social networking sites in the 2014 and 2015 years. The graph is divided in six groups with two different bar charts in each one. Each bar have has a different length in according to their its percentage and they are is coloured green and blue to represent the different years.

As can be seen, in both in the 2014 and 2015 the most people used one social network. The percentages were 36 in the 2014 and 28 in the 2015. Just under there that are were people which who used two sites. The percentages in the two years were more or less the same, 23 and 24%.

The people who used five site were really low. They were 2% in 2014 and they barely grew in 2015 to 4%.

Surprisingly the number of people who did not use a social network were really high. They were 22% in 2014 and decreased to 21% in 2015. Their percentages were very similar to the percentage of the people who used two social network sites.

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