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I wonder if I made any mistakes in a résumé I translated for somebody. The article is designed to analyse the data found in Zoroastrian and Georgian texts, preserved in highland regions in Georgia in fragments and narratives of “Religion of Sons of God’’. They deal with the soul’s journeys after death, Paradise and the cult of trees which is related to Paradise. All this is reflected in the essential part of the sixth century AD narrative of Georgia’s conversion to Christianity. By analysing this data, one can see that in that place where the old Svetitskhoveli was built, four different cultural traditions happened upon: the ancient Zoroastrian world, the local “Sons of God” tradition, as well as Hebrew-Christian and Hellenistic-Roman Christian tendencies.

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I wonder if I made any mistakes in a résumé I translated for somebody.

The article is designed to analyse the data found in Zoroastrian and Georgian texts, preserved in highland regions in {better: of} [1] Georgia in fragments and narratives of “Religion of Sons of God’’. They deal with the soul’s journeys after death, Paradise, and the cult of trees which is related to Paradise. All this is reflected in the essential part of the sixth century AD narrative of Georgia’s conversion to Christianity. By analysing this data, one can see that in that place {better: area, region, location} [2] where the old Svetitskhoveli was built, four different cultural traditions happened upon converged / intersected: [3] the ancient Zoroastrian world, the local “Sons of God” tradition, as well as Hebrew-Christian and Hellenistic-Roman Christian tendencies.

  1. Okay, but I would use "of" here to avoid "in...in".
  2. "Place" sounds a bit informal in this context.
  3. To "happen upon" something implies more that someone found something by accident/chance.

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