The first vacation
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The first vacation in Turkey was pretty wonderful! In spite of a short time we spent having rest there, it was as breathtaking as I expected. Kemer bears a striking resemblance to Crimea. The hotel's beach compared very unfavourably with most others, but there was no problem, because of my friends, entertainments and kind people around us.
There are few words about my friends by the way. We are the "rescue rangers" for each other. I mean the song from the famous cartoon: "when we are around the chips are never down". When we're together, we are ready to have fun from dusk till dawn. The more I think about my next vacation, the better I feel... We have already bought tickets to Salou, Spain!
Are you looking forward to the summer?
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My first vacation
My first vacation in Turkey was pretty wonderful! In spite of the short time we spent resting there, it was as breathtaking as I expected. Kemer bears a striking resemblance to Crimea. The hotel's beach compared very unfavourably with most others, but there was no problem, because of my friends, the entertainment, and friendly people around us. [Since you already used the word "friends", try to use a synonym for the word "friendly" in the same sentence so as not to sound too redundant. This is more of a comment on writing style, not on grammar]
By the way, about my friends: We are each other's "rescue rangers", by which I mean the song from the famous cartoon: "when we are around the chips are never down". When we're together, we are ready to have fun from dusk till dawn. The more I think about my next vacation, the better I feel... We have already bought tickets to Salou, Spain! Are you looking forward to the summer? [This last sentence may make sense in a written blog post or in a video blog if you are inviting readers or listeners to reply or to comment, but if you are not expecting comments then this last sentence is not a good way to conclude]
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