A red dress
From an early age, I was educated in a very strict atmosphere. Everything that surrounded me was thoroughly calculated to guide me through a straight way. All my teachers, my lessons, my homework, my clothes and even my feelings and thoughts were scheduled by my parents.
Maybe other kids could take the liberty of dreaming their lives away, but not me because I belong to a very important family with a good reputation. The moral code was the most important matter and my brothers and sisters knew it too. Any inappropriate behaviour was severely punished.
There not was place to laughing or simply smiling. Life is a serious business and, of course, you can think that my parents were very hard shell persons, but after all of these years, I am entirely convinced that they were right. At least my mother. God knows that I tried to be as my father. He was a mirror to me, but everything changed when, one night, my dad opened the door and came in, wearing a red dress.
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A Red Dress make sure titles are capitalized
From an early age, I was educated within ("in" makes sense but "within" sounds more natural) a very strict atmosphere. Everything that surrounded me was thoroughly calculated to guide me through a straight path (path sounds more natural than way here). All my teachers, lessons, homework, clothes, and even my feelings and thoughts were managed by my parents.(you don't have to say "my" multiple times in a row and "managed" fits this situation more than "scheduled")
(shortened this)Other kids could have ("take" isn't the right verb for this) the liberty of dreaming their lives away, but not me because I belong to a very important family with a good reputation. The moral code was the most important matter and my brothers and sisters knew it too. Any inappropriate behavior was severely punished.
There was no (rearranged the position of "was" and "no" is more natural than "not") place to laughing or simply smile ("smiling" uses the wrong verb tense). Life is a serious business and, of course, you can think that my parents were very hard people (you don't have to say "shell" and plural for person is "people"), but after all of these years, I am entirely convinced that they were right. At least my mother. God knows that I tried to be like my father. He was a mirror of me, but everything changed when, one night, my dad opened the door and came in, wearing a red dress.
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A Red Dress
From an early age, I was educated in a very strict atmosphere. Everything that surrounded me was thoroughly calculated to guide me in a structured manner. through a straight way. All of my teachers, my lessons, my homework, my clothes and even my feelings and thoughts were scheduled by my parents.
Maybe other kids could take the liberty of dreaming their lives away, but not me because I belong to a very important family with a good reputation. The moral code was the most important matter and my brothers and sisters knew it too. Any inappropriate behaviour was severely punished.
There was no place for laughing or simply smiling. Life is a serious business and, of course, you can think that my parents were very hard shell people, but after all of these years, I am entirely convinced that they were right. At least my mother. God knows that I tried to be like my father. He was a role model to me, but everything changed when, one night, my dad opened the door and came in, wearing a red dress.
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